Let Me Sleep Away

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

About a abusive father, pushing the mother towards suicide. Driving the daughter crazy, who eventually goes 'after' her mother.

(For a contest :P )

When I was younger--

I saw my mommy cry...

and curse at him...

He broke her heart--

and I watched as she tried to reassmble it.

And that's the day I swore...

I'd never let him forget, again...

And that's the night, that I promised...

I'd never believe in love--

because it does not exist.

 

Later that night, she took a bottle of pills.

And cried herself deep to sleep...

Even in my dreams, I could feel her start to weep...

Hearing the words...

'Just let me sleep this away...'

And that was the morning--

I watched the men carry her far away.

And they say...I can't go with you.

I can't stay with you...but I'll miss you...

But these feet can't bring me with you...

But It's how the story goes.

And It's out of my control...

But I've got to find other way...

To make it alone...

Or keep a straight face.

And maybe I will see you when I'm gone.

And maybe time--

Time will prove me wrong.

I can't tell the stars from the downtown lights...

Sirens waving through the streets...

Did mommy miss my call?

And now I know, I can't fix what I've done..

I start to shake--

and begin to cry.

My eyes...won't dry.

"...Just....

...Let...

...Me...

...Sleep...

...This...

...Away..."

 

 


Submitted: July 29, 2013

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Daisy Ink

Awww, this is so heart breaking and sad. You vividly captured the heart ach women feel after a break up/ divorce and not only the tole it takes on the adults but the kids too. Plus, I love how the speaker alludes to some painful outcome of her mother's decay. Awesome poem!! It strongly paints the emotions a person feels in such a situation

Mon, July 29th, 2013 5:44am

city-lights

Such a heart breaking and beautiful poem. The child in this poem seems so innocent, sad and alone. This is written beautifully and it flows nicely. Youve got the pain and emotion in this poem just right. Thank you for sharing i loved reading this. -Ikky, xox

Mon, July 29th, 2013 11:02am

Author
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Thank you :D

Mon, July 29th, 2013 7:17am

AntonioWestley

A prime example of what children shouldn't be exposed to. Well done it gets a like from me

Mon, July 29th, 2013 12:11pm

Author
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Thanks :)

Mon, July 29th, 2013 7:17am

Modelwriter

Very sad. I couldn't imagine what a child goes through when they loose a parent... never had to go through that myself thank god. Very well wrote!

Mon, July 29th, 2013 10:57pm

Author
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Thanks :D

Mon, July 29th, 2013 5:14pm

dianasanchez106

aww that was sad and beautiful!

Tue, July 30th, 2013 1:13am

Author
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Thanks! :D

Mon, July 29th, 2013 6:14pm

Evelina Duile

Really sad and emotional. You captured the daughter's internal confusion, anger, and sadness. Were you influenced by the Paramore song "Only Exception"? cause it reminds me of it. That is one of my all time favorite songs. Great job!

Tue, July 30th, 2013 3:39am

Author
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Haha, that's what the first part was from. This was a contest piece, I actually chose that one from the list of songs :D

Tue, July 30th, 2013 6:51am

Liam Strong

My favourite stanzas were from "Maybe I will see you when I'm gone," to the very end. The idea somewhat perplexes me, though I think some of the simplicity in the beginning is what throws me off; it starts out a tad dry, but gets very defined and full of progressive complexity towards the end of the poem...I find the story itself fairly interesting, but I mean, you could adapt this to an even better story, yet whatever doesn't matter to me. I give this a like, and thanks for requesting this to me!

Tue, July 30th, 2013 8:16pm

Author
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Thank you, I'm happy you like it :D

Tue, July 30th, 2013 5:39pm

Emmett Cohl

Very good. I liked it, made me cry. I felt the conveyed emotion very strongly. Brilliant work, just what I was looking for.
~Em

Wed, July 31st, 2013 9:40pm

aruntp

Beautifully written and really emotional thoughts you have framed very well from the past. tfs.

Thu, August 1st, 2013 7:55am

Wisegirl15

Extremely emotional, the way a daughter sees her mother in pain becuz of her abusive father..I have always wondered at the disturbed psychology these kids must possess..and the suicide to follow her mom..you totally broke the readers heart :D
excellent poem
One tiny error...the spelling of *reassemble, line 5 :)

Fri, August 9th, 2013 1:55pm

Author
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Oops, my bad. Thanks for the correction :3

Fri, August 9th, 2013 3:54pm

ErinBlaze

Beautiful but sad, I loved it!

Fri, August 9th, 2013 7:42pm

LittleMizOz

I must say this is really well written! I had a mental image and was touched by how this went! Talented! Good job! Keep up the great work!
Yours,
Oz

Thu, September 5th, 2013 9:46pm

bobthebuilder

Touching and powerful poem!

Wed, November 13th, 2013 4:58am

Elizabeth Smit

This is a beautiful poem and very well written.You have talent.Can not wait for more* Keep on writing and you will go far^_^ ~Liz

Mon, December 9th, 2013 4:39pm

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