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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Just about everyone knows how it feels to loose something you held so dear. Here's mine, put into words

It broke too soon

It broke too fast

Love’s not something that will last


Forgiving arms

No more for you

I’ve lost the one thing thought to be true


No more make-believe

Not for me

I’m back here stuck in reality


Of lovers lost

And dreams forgotten

Won’t I ever be again

Truly smitten


Submitted: January 29, 2013

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I loved this! I think the last stanza could use a little improving; the poem had a nice flow until the last lines. But I love how with a few words you express a lot of emotion! Great job :)w

Tue, January 29th, 2013 11:55am


Thanks! Realy appreciate it.. Will work on the last stanza :)

Thu, January 31st, 2013 6:45am

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