The flower of love...

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is inspired by something that happened to one of my best friends
I just wanted to say i love her veryyyyyy much
and i hope she likes it..
as well as all you lovely people

my feelings are prying us apart
each distant word tearing up my heart
you promised it wouldnt change, we'd still be friends
and yet i really feel this is the end
maybe this is too weird
maybe i should let you go
of my feelings i am sure
all i wanted was to let you know


Submitted: September 26, 2009

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SLJONES

really like this well done sj

Sat, September 26th, 2009 1:10pm

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thanksss
it's about my friend

Sat, September 26th, 2009 6:30am

SLJONES

really like this well done sj

Sat, September 26th, 2009 1:10pm

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lol

Sat, September 26th, 2009 6:30am

loveletters77

i like this (: im in the exact situation.
nice poem

Sun, September 27th, 2009 5:44am

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thanks lol

Tue, September 29th, 2009 8:12am

Mistress of Word Play

Felt this way myself in the past. Was married, he played, finally divorced him. Lived alone for 10 years then I met a wonderful man who is my husband. You are better of without him.
Loved this.
Susan

Sun, September 27th, 2009 4:39pm

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aww thanks for all the luvly comments people!!!
btw this is abt my friend

Tue, September 29th, 2009 8:12am

McKenzie Falls

*Sniffles* I love this babe!!!! It explains everything, I couldn't have sed it any better :) THANK YOU

mwah x x

Wed, September 30th, 2009 8:04am

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kayy sweetie glad you like it

Wed, September 30th, 2009 8:12am

the musically challenged cricket

cute and sorry if this is really about you and your friend. I know how hard it is to lose someone you're close to

Thu, October 1st, 2009 2:44am

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aww thanksss
its ok i gess cz im helping her
but im sure shell be really glad of all the support
xxx

Fri, October 2nd, 2009 8:25am

lehi girl72509

ok I raelly like it, but at teh same time, the beat is really off. Like-some lines are long, some are short, and it really has no flow to it. If you can fix that, it will be a lot better. Otherwise, great poem sad interesting message, nice-ish rhyme scheme, it could use a little tweaking-like maybe you could split it when the rhyming changes from couplet to quatrain?

Tue, February 23rd, 2010 4:02pm

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ok i cant rely rem this one at all lol
and loool most are kinda amateurish so i dont relly kind do it to make it all perfect
and its free rhyme lol

Fri, February 26th, 2010 8:26am

xOxOxOFcukM3xOxOx13

Awwww, this poem is not too long and not too short.
It isn't giving way to much, or even too little.
It's just perfect in its own little way.
It's so sad too... Wow, and the flow of this poem is extravagantly well written.
You should be proud of yourself for writing such a beautiful poem ! :)

- Jenniie

P.S : I gave it a like !

Mon, June 7th, 2010 6:06pm

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awww thanks!!! this was inspired by one of my lovliest closest friends who is actually on booksie and has been nominated (WOOOOO) hahaa thanks for the like!!!! YAY

Mon, June 7th, 2010 11:13pm

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