Diamond Heart

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Diamonds Aren't So Delicate

Your heart is harder than a diamond,
Cold to the touch,
Keeping away all the pain,
that could be caused by lust.
.
Locked away inside,
Like a chest,
A box full of diamonds,
Waiting for its quest.
.
Thieves and robbers try to steal it away,
But they are frozen by your steely gaze,
Why am i the lucky begger?
Who is the only one in which you bestow this pleasure.


Submitted: March 23, 2010

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heyalex

Wow, I loved this! I am very impressed. I'm not really a fan of poetry in general, but this was emotional and catchy all at once. It flowed well and seemed professional. It was serious and a little bit sad, but the rhythm and rhyme were methodical and enjoyable. Fabulous work! =]

Tue, March 23rd, 2010 6:56pm

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Thank You, It's good to know even someone who not is a fan of poetry can stand to read this, thanks again ^-^

Tue, March 23rd, 2010 12:01pm

Alivewiththegloryoflove

This was really nice! The metaphor was powerful and you definitely have a lot of talent!

Tue, March 23rd, 2010 7:28pm

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Thank-You!

Tue, March 23rd, 2010 12:30pm

Iva Stone Adair

I really liked this poem of yours. I agree with 'Twilight Lurver', you're good for a guy. =] Keep on writing, Hun.

Tue, March 23rd, 2010 7:52pm

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Thank you (:
And i can't see why boys can't be good at poetry, but i get your point ^-^

Wed, March 24th, 2010 9:18am

Summer Forever

Wow I really like this! I gave it a 'like' :)

Tue, March 23rd, 2010 8:02pm

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Thank you very much (:

Wed, March 24th, 2010 9:17am

emokidz14

I want to 1st thank you for taking the time to comment on my profile. And secondly I love this poem...thank you for suggesting me to read it. It was very worth while Keep up the great work!!!!

Tue, March 23rd, 2010 8:22pm

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Thank you!

Wed, March 24th, 2010 9:17am

mizzmt

That's really good!!!

Tue, March 23rd, 2010 11:50pm

Author
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Thanks!

Wed, March 24th, 2010 9:16am

mommy3

Very good poem. I can feel the emotions in the poem and it flowed well and wasn't forced. Good job Jessica :)

Wed, March 24th, 2010 2:01am

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Thank-You ^-^

Wed, March 24th, 2010 9:16am

Foliostar

Like the rhymne nice flow

Wed, March 24th, 2010 2:38am

Author
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Thanks

Wed, March 24th, 2010 9:16am

Henna

This is such a great poem, I love some of the wording you used like " Thieves and robbers try to steal it away".
:) keep up the good work and can't wait to read more of your writing :)

Wed, March 24th, 2010 7:38am

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Thank you
i rather liked that bit myself (:

Wed, March 24th, 2010 9:16am

VampireDoll

I love it, its powerful and good. Please check out my work, and i cant wait to see your next work!

Wed, March 24th, 2010 8:54am

Author
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Thank you, i will go take a look, i'm sure it's good ^.^

Wed, March 24th, 2010 9:15am

AquaBlue

WOW!! i like it!! the meaning is SO amazing!! wow! (again ;D) i would love to read more! update me as soon as you post.. xD

Wed, March 24th, 2010 12:57pm

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Thank You!
And i will (:

Wed, March 24th, 2010 9:15am

Aylanna Horsemaster

I liked the rhyme, and it flowed well. The only thing I noticed was that the first stanza has only 3 lines, while the others have 4. I have been told that it's important to have consistency. I thank you for writing on my profile, and hope you keep on writing. We need more men who write poetry in this world. Keep up the good work!

Wed, March 24th, 2010 5:15pm

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I Know :\
My english teacher pointed that out (Well, he is't my english teacher, more like a close friend who got fired, but was my english teacher) but he also said i tend to have my own style, and maybe being a bit different is good.
Thanks for commeting, and i agree, men should write more (:

Wed, March 24th, 2010 10:18am

ReverendStJimmy

Awwww it's cute =]

Wed, March 24th, 2010 5:31pm

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Thanks (:

Wed, March 24th, 2010 11:09am

Thornix

Okay... So your poems leave me speachless, that IS amazing!

Your a Great poet Fashion(:

Thornix^^
xxx

Wed, March 24th, 2010 5:40pm

Author
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Thank-You Sweetie x

Wed, March 24th, 2010 11:10am

rosalieemo

thats really nice

Wed, March 24th, 2010 6:34pm

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Thanks

Wed, March 24th, 2010 11:39am

Fyregx

I Loved It, Nice And Deep. Keep Up The Good Work

Wed, March 24th, 2010 6:44pm

Author
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Thank you

Wed, March 24th, 2010 11:57am

BlackStarWolf

This is very good. Hope to read more of your writing.

Wed, March 24th, 2010 7:22pm

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Thanks

Wed, March 24th, 2010 1:01pm

avidxreader44

wow, sounds great. keep up the good work on your poetry. it's hard NOT to like ;)

Wed, March 24th, 2010 8:05pm

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Thank you (:
Ha (:

Wed, March 24th, 2010 1:07pm

guitarplayer

Wow it flowed really well and it was a really beautiful idea =] It made me feel quite emotional >.<
Would you mind reading my novel, Atlantis? Thanks =]

Wed, March 24th, 2010 8:45pm

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Thank you (:
and sure

Thu, March 25th, 2010 9:22am

JustSomeKid

Wow, well I'm a guy who writes poetry and I think that that was brilliant. I loved the description, you can just imagine this happening, for once some poetry that makes sense and counjers up something so brilliant! Liked!

Wed, March 24th, 2010 8:46pm

Author
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Thank you!
and good to know i'm not the only one

Thu, March 25th, 2010 9:21am

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