Losing Innocence

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

It's about rape.
As ever, I don't want crticism.
Thanks.

Hold on tight,
I’m falling tonight
This isn’t right
But I can’t fight
 
Lingering here,
You bring the fear
I hate you near
You and your leer
 
“Just once more”
You’re not a lure,
You’re just a bore
You stupid whore


Submitted: September 18, 2010

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HelloKittyFucksTheMainstream

You are such a good poet 0.0
Amazing.
shame I'm going to have to kill your ex for this

Sat, September 18th, 2010 4:24am

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Thanks, and just leave him.

Fri, September 17th, 2010 9:26pm

ladygothicka

good poem very dark KMU

Sat, September 18th, 2010 5:30am

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Thanks and sure

Fri, September 17th, 2010 10:58pm

iceraven94

wow. i love how its so differentfrom the poems here. its so creative and dark and it can be a real thing!great job!:)

Sat, September 18th, 2010 7:27am

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Thank you!

Sat, September 18th, 2010 1:31am

EmilyStiches

love the last line!

Sat, September 18th, 2010 11:57am

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Thanks!

Sat, September 18th, 2010 5:00am

NeverMindMe

You're a really good poet, Christian. =]
I really hope this wasn't written because of experience...
And I hope you're okay.

Sat, September 18th, 2010 3:08pm

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Thank you ^^ and I'm fine...

Sat, September 18th, 2010 8:06pm

Shellie Burg

very good poem

Mon, September 20th, 2010 3:40pm

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Thanks

Tue, September 21st, 2010 4:38am

TisIsMehGhosty

Not much of losing it, but having it stolen.
Sorry you went through that.

Mon, September 20th, 2010 6:18pm

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True, true...

Tue, September 21st, 2010 4:45am

crazyteddy

whoa, nice, love the last stanza!!! i'm sorry if your writting this if it actully happened to you

Wed, September 22nd, 2010 7:41am

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Thanks!

Wed, September 22nd, 2010 1:27am

elmoshurtside

I like it, yet it confuses me. I wish i knew more about the situation. nice job over all though!

Mon, September 27th, 2010 4:22am

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Thanks!

Mon, September 27th, 2010 1:07am

RaineStone

Short poem with a very strong meaning, I love it a lot. (:

Thu, September 30th, 2010 2:02pm

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Thank you!

Fri, October 1st, 2010 1:45am

Kritika

Sat, October 2nd, 2010 8:58am

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Thank you sweetie c:

Sat, October 2nd, 2010 8:49pm

Sierra MacKenzie

Short and sweet. That seems to always give us the most emotion and the most out of what we're trying to stay. Love it :)

Mon, October 4th, 2010 7:41pm

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Thank you!

Tue, October 5th, 2010 4:15am

mylittlesuicidenote

Your amazing at writting poemss :)x
~Robyn

Tue, October 12th, 2010 11:08am

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Thanks c:

Tue, October 12th, 2010 4:14am

Vincey Delaney

wow, so cool, love it!! It certainly caught my feelings!! Great work here!

Sat, October 16th, 2010 6:42am

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Thanks!

Sat, October 16th, 2010 4:54am

DreamKeeper

So good! Im on to read more!

Mon, November 8th, 2010 5:48am

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Thanks! :D

Mon, November 8th, 2010 1:54am

Ally999

I really loved this me being a rape victim myself thoght your a great poet, amazing :D
But have you wrote about rape cos you experenced it?? im so sorry if you have, i know how hard it is to wright about it. I hope your okay if it did happen to you!!

Mon, January 3rd, 2011 8:14pm

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Thanks! ^^

Mon, January 3rd, 2011 8:57pm

StrangeMind

I love this! The short lines make it so punchy and strong, which I think helps to show the anger and hate.
The end line is also very captivating, the use of 'whore' helping it to seem to much more colloquial, and every day.
This is just great! Well done! Definitely going to go and read more!

Thu, April 5th, 2012 9:06pm

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Awh thank you! It's what I was going for - I hoped it would bring it back to earth c:

Thu, April 5th, 2012 2:08pm

Ian Dawn

Love this its short and to the point and full of emotion.

Tue, April 10th, 2012 5:47am

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thank you

Wed, April 11th, 2012 5:32am

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