The Rose of a Battlefield
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Book by: Finders Keepers
Caught in the middle of a war, between her father's business and a rival's, Grace Williams is sent to Florida to live with a family friend. Soon after her arrival, Grace is informed that the owner of the rival's business has a son currently living in Florida. She is given the task of finding out about the rival's business through his son.
What happens when she falls for him? What happens when he finds out about her objective?
At least she isn't the only one keeping secrets.
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Submitted: March 06, 2013
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KMU!!! please!! this is so interesting & I want to read more!!! :D
Love it, a very interesting start! Keep me updated please?! xxx Rash :)
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Thank you so much! Will do!!!
This is good! Nice length, good plot, and great grammar and spelling :)
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Thank you! I try really hard to keep those things running in my novels(:
DEFINITELY like it so far, actually, I love everything about it. Even though I think I've heard the storyline in some movie some where, yours is majorly different and holds lots of promise. I also liked the summary, reminds me of reading a blurb on the back of the book. I also like the tag "finders keepers". I can already tell that Xavior is going to be one of the favorites in this novel, and obviously Grace, but no offence, I kinda hate her father alot but I know I'll hate Xavior father even more (unless he's really nice, which I'm hoping he isn't). Forgot to mention I love Grant the most right now.
Anyways, final comment: this reminds me of Romeo and Juliet wih the "starcrossed lovers" thing going on, and I adore it. Hope to see more chapters posted up soon, keep me updated please (and thanks for posting the comment on my profile) - Angel :)
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Oh my gosh, you made my day! This means so much to me (to see readers give feedback like this) And I've had many comments on the whole Romeo and Juliet thing. I've never actually read it, but I know the basics and I've watched parts of the movie(: I will most definitely keep you updated!
Well, first things first: I couldn't help but notice your summary. I think you should revise it a little bit, making it stronger and compelling (don't worry, I'm not going to go all Pro book Editor on you, lol). The prologue was really short, I think it could benefit from more detail and background, (only because it doesn't seem like a dire thing to include in this story before chapter one w/o the details), as well as smoother transitions within paragraphs and between them. I think a little more description would benefit the whole thing.
I'm not being picky, am I?
I am curious as to how she is going to execute her plan which is why I am giving you a little bit of criticism, constructively of course. I think this story could be amazing! I love Grant and even better, I'm absolutely in LOVE with Xavier. I can't help but notice when a guy has a gorgeous smile, let alone beautiful eyes. I love that cute moment Grace and Xavier had. Especially when he was like, "I said that out loud, didn't I?" I DIED! Lol. Any-who, I'm very curious as to where this is going to be headed.
Keep Me Updated,
~Z
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Thank you so much! The constructive critisism is always needed! Heck, I literally asked for it! I will definately take your advice when I get the chance! And of course I'll keep you updated(:
Amazing beginning, this was fantastic, your such a taletned writer :O Wow, love it :D You have a fan!
Cheers!
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Oh my gosh, thank you so much! And I saw your fan request; it excited me! *snoopy dance*
So weird, being my bestie's name is Gracie Williams....
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That is really weird, but awesome! Tell her I'm writing a novel about her, because I secretly stalk her;D
This sounds like a really good storyline so far! :) And I wouldn't worry about the length. There's no guideline for that :)
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Awh thank you! And I try not to but I used to get a lot of complaints about it, so now I just lengthen it(:
Love it! this is really good idea and its super original! Please KMU:)
~Megan
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Thank you! I didn't want something that has been used so many times, because after a while, it gets boring. I'm glad you like the idea! I will:D
Something tells me that he at least knows her father by the sound of her last name. Plus, with the obvious interest they share in each other, the tension in the plot is already high. On top of whatever the girl plans to do for her father's business. This is quite intriguing so far. ;-)
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I find that comment intrguing! And maybe he does know her father, maybe not. And duh, of course they have interest in each other! Who doesn't whant the whole Romeo and Juliet romance cliche? ANd I like the begging to just dive into the tension. Ain't nobody got time for waiting! Thanks for the comment (:
Really like it, this sounds like something I'd get real fun out of! KMU and thanks for the request!
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Thank you so much! I will keep you updated, and no problem!(:
Kmu
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I will!
This IS incredible, Seriously I love it :D.. I am already hooked you have to update soon :).. Xavior sounds so damn HOT!!, any character pictures??.. Please KMU!! XD
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Oh my gosh, thank you! And will be updating soon! I'll also post character pictures! I will:D
??? Love this story already! Seriously! You have me addicted! You're writing was awesome! I can't wait for your next chapter! Please keep me updated!:DDD
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Oh my gosh, really? That means the world, darling! Thank you so much! I will:D
Ohhhhhh snap!!! She's already falling for the rival's son - I can feel it! But Xavier sounds hella hott!!! I'm already liking the direction of this novel and am excited to see where you go with it! Can Grace follow through to help her dad or will love overcome her!? Eeeep!! KMU!!!
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You know exactly what I'm doing! STOP IT! ;O Hehe just kidding! I love that someone has the same mind as I :D And I'm not sure, maybe she'll even do both! Guess you'll find out! I will(:
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