Poem by: flavoredair
Submitted: December 28, 2008
© Copyright 2016 flavoredair. All rights reserved.
whoa, thats scary. i would like to survive without pain, once too.
It's a double edged sword pain=feeling, feeling=pain, I suppose there's a hole in that logic, b/c not everything you feel hurts... sometimes it's just crazy.... I'm in an odd frame of mind, aren't I? Ta!
Pain only brings pain... I know the feeling, if I could just drown it out I would. This is a very powerful poem, much like the other one I read. Keep up the good work :o)
Pain begets pain, it's so true and misery loves company. It's almost ...poetic... how they amplify one another. (That was so corny, I'm sorry...) Thank you for reading.
Gift Of Noni
Very profound. Shows a very indepth understanding of the subject. Sitting around tending to our addictions isn't the worse part; it's the things we could be doing instead, but never get around to. "Pawning our stairs"
We ignore the problems. We treat the symptoms. We don't realize they are connected. Thank you once more. I agree, oh the things we could do if we weren't so absorbed.
i loved it...it has such outstanding emotion...i really felt it.
Thank you so much.
it's really nice i can understand ! i like iht :)
Thank you. I'm glad you like it.
This was excellently written. I enjoyed your unique style, it made an interesting read all the way through. Wonderful emotion. What inspired you to write this?
Lack of sleep, teddy bears, insecure feelings... (Toy Story? Velveteen Rabbit?) Brownie... my bear, he has little marble eyes that have chipped over the years. =) (Perhaps we have an allegory for our childhood, or a child lost.)
Thanks for telling me about your story. Loved it and I love this too. Read mine? It awesomes. ^_^
Absolutely, thank you. =)
Fantastic I like it, and normally I don't like poetry so thats saying something.
Thank you so much!!!!
all of your poems are so motional and beautiful
i loved it
keep upp the good work =]
Thank you. I try very hard. =)
I am a sucker for poetry, and I felt I owed you it because I get really frustrated when people ask me to read their work so inconsiderately...
Killer last line (good use of repetition and linking), like conforming to our own sadness and loneliness as a reflection of our small worlds as a whole. Angry writing, seriously scary stuff.
Self torture is so unbelievably easy and addictive.
Easily read flow, cool.
I understand... I hadn't read your bio... I take responsibility. (I am a shameless self-promoter) You weren't asked maliciously. To be honest I liked your pen name. As for your feedback.... I am quite pleased you enjoyed this piece. I myself find it a little under-developed and immature, so your reassuring words help me over look the flaws. Thank you so much for reading.
A "wonder-full" write!! I love the angry imagery created which forces the reader to examine their emotions. Very nicely done.....Jerry (*_*)
Thank you very much.
very true writing. i once heard that where there is light, there is shadows. the only way to dispel the shadows is by completely turning off the light. i guess we can never live with out pain, but i think living is worth it. Good Job! keep writing. XD
Oh My Gosh, I've never thought about it that way! The only way to dispel the shadows is by completely turning off the light? God I wish I'd come up with that. That was good. I REALLY appreciate your feedback. It rings so true... Thank you for reading! (I think I'll further explore the shadows in the darkness concept.)--- wait, do shadows exist in the dark? Or are they just masked? You have my mind reeling. It brings up that whole hope debate in my mind... (Is hope a good thing? If you have it than you need it, why do you need it etc.) And as for life... "I live for the moment, 'cause that's what I can..." *_~ (I think that last bit was Sheryl Crow)
Welcome to my club. ( I invented it like 5 seconds ago by the way... i think I'll name it... A poets guild to shadows....gah! I suck at names.) This debate, i think, is the deepest one( apart from the meaning of life that is.) I will also dwell in the shadows, trying to bring an meaning and form to them.
You know I do attack shadows in another poem of mine... so I call treasurer... or at least some sort of shadow foot soldier... thingy. Form in shadows... We shape them... kind of ironic. They shadow us... ^_^ I haven't felt this deep in ages.
Wow, I love this! The first verse is definetly my favoutire part. Well done, I will iLike it!
wow very powerful.
most of all made me think.
Thank you. Professional? You make me blush. I'm glad you liked it.
exceptional job, well done. :) I loved it
Thank you. =)
Thinkable. Very deep, but it becomes lighthearted and thoughtful with the use of the right words. And it has! You rule. That's all I'm gonna say.
Thinkable? I love that word! Lighthearted is an interesting way to look at it. I suppose I needed to contrast the context. Thank you.
I can so relate to this poem, especially the line "I think I like my misery." You get used to it, don't you? Yet at the same time you just want it to end. Anyway, good job, great poem.
Misery? Oh yeah. I thread through underlining anxiety that lives beneath the surface of misery. Thank you for reading.
I enjoyed this very much. It sort of sounded a bit like a song. Like, if you put it to music, you could make a serious angry piece out of it. Really good. I relate.
Maybe I will one day. Thanks! ^_^
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