A mystery

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

What happens when a close one betrays or leaves you? This poem describes the feelings....

It seemed to be a mystery,

A big mystery to me.

How it happened like this?

How it happened so suddenly?

 

 

 

All that what you did, everything was fake.

I was stupid that time, why didn't I ever wake?

 

 

 

Why did it ever happen?

Like this, in this way?

'I hope this is a dream'

Thats all I'll pray.

 

 

 

I had never thought that,

you'd go away from me.

I had never thought that,

you'd go away so quickly.

 

 

 

All the time I spent,

thinking about you,

was a really a waste of time,

because now I know it isn't true.

 

 

 

So it isn't a real mystery,

isn't a big mystery to me.

It has happened like this.

It has happened so suddenly.


Submitted: February 08, 2014

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Nandana Dinesh

nice
i like it

Sat, February 8th, 2014 4:25pm

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Thanks! Eager to read your poems too!

Sat, February 8th, 2014 8:27am

Aparna Gopan

great work!!!

Sat, February 8th, 2014 4:50pm

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Thanks!

Sat, February 8th, 2014 8:51am

Whitlinger

Wow, this was a really nice poem! I especially love the symmetry of it (starting with a question and answering the question), as well as the rhyming. The last two lines gave me chills, because you wrote it so simply yet it was so much more. A like from me! :D

Sun, February 9th, 2014 1:59am

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Thanks so much! I had to think for almost an hour on how to end it in an different way. This comment made my day :D....

Sat, February 8th, 2014 10:53pm

thumblina Aka vandana

waow this is a lovely poem....well written....full of emotions.....good use of words.....keep writting and please do intimate me...
will be waiting for your next poem

happy writting

Sun, February 9th, 2014 6:31am

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Thanks a lot! I'll be posting some more soon!

Sat, February 8th, 2014 10:51pm

Amberly Sue

Very nice! I really love it. Very down to earth.

Sun, February 9th, 2014 7:59am

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Thanks a lot!

Sun, February 9th, 2014 1:47am

Lisa Ayers

Nice rhythm and flow, well done.

Mon, February 10th, 2014 1:54am

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Thanks a lot!

Mon, February 10th, 2014 8:06am

angelique30

This was a very nice poem. Very nicely written and I love the emotion that you brought out. Keep it up :) thank you for the request :)

Wed, February 12th, 2014 5:43am

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Thanks so much! I was really sad when I wrote this about something so... Anyways, thanks again for your kind words!

Wed, February 12th, 2014 1:40am

Jane Conner

this. is. just. amazing. I really felt for this, the structure was really good, the rhythm was great. I was cheated on recently, you got the emotions RIGHT THERE, BULLSEYE absolutely wonderful, well done

Wed, February 12th, 2014 6:31pm

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Aww! Thank you so much! You are so sweet! Thanks again!

Thu, February 13th, 2014 1:43am

Volatile

Very good rhyme an flow :) I liked the was you started and ended with a question :)

Wed, February 12th, 2014 8:43pm

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Thanks for your sweet comments!!:):):)

Thu, February 13th, 2014 1:42am

Sk2093

Wow this is an amazingly written poem. It is so beautiful and heartfelt. It is sad when such things happen. All one can do is try their best to move on and spend time thinking of those who truely care for them. This is a wonderfully written poem and you depicted the emotions in a really great way. Well done and gets a 'like' from me :) - Sk2093 x

Thu, February 13th, 2014 4:01pm

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Thanks so much! Your comment made me smile! I was 'really' sad when I wrote this poem so I guess that is why it is so 'sad' and emotional. Thanks again for your sweet comments!

Thu, February 13th, 2014 8:32am

DanielReidy

Very nice, simple but with a meaningful message :) Like it a lot! Keep it up, i wanna see more poems from you :D

Thu, February 13th, 2014 5:42pm

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Thanks a lot!:)

Thu, February 13th, 2014 10:25am

Ever A. Darling

This is beautifully written. I love the flow of it. Great job, love (:

Thu, February 13th, 2014 6:55pm

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Thank you so much!:):):)

Fri, February 14th, 2014 1:39am

ShadaStorm120

This is an awesome poem, I love this, it is meaningful and I love the way it's written, great job.

Thu, February 13th, 2014 7:09pm

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Thanks a lot!:)

Fri, February 14th, 2014 1:38am

Nagz

very well written, your half rhymes are incredible... i like it!! great job.

Thu, February 13th, 2014 8:42pm

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Thank you so much!

Fri, February 14th, 2014 1:38am

LiliaRayne

This was GREAT!!! I love a poem when I can relate to it emotionally!! I went through a heartbreak and the thoughts running through my head at the time is a lot like what you have in your poem!! I love it!!! Hopefully, you get better from here on out!!! XD

Thu, February 13th, 2014 8:59pm

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Thank you so much for reading my poem! Thanks for commenting too! Well, thankfully, I didn't went through a heartbreak when I wrote this poem, lol, but had a really big fight over something with a close one. Anyways, thanks again!

Fri, February 14th, 2014 1:28am

AnonD

I really like how you started and ended it with similar lines. Good work! KMU on your poems?

Thu, February 13th, 2014 9:18pm

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I'll surely keep you updated. Thanks so much for your sweet words!

Fri, February 14th, 2014 1:37am

Gitee

Wonderful poem, I like it and I also like the words that you used.

Thu, February 13th, 2014 9:26pm

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Thank you for reading and commenting!:)

Fri, February 14th, 2014 1:36am

Maggie Williams

Thi is beautiful and incredibly well written! great job!!

Thu, February 13th, 2014 10:16pm

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Thanks so much!

Fri, February 14th, 2014 1:36am

FragileEyes

Hello Flora,

Just read your poem as requested and now I feel sad. I'm sure we've all felt how you've described in this poem, I know I certainly have. And, if it happens suddenly it's confusing. Great work though and please write something happy for your next one :-)

Thu, February 13th, 2014 10:25pm

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Lol! This was my first attempt on poem and the words just burst out of me as I cried (I had fought with a family member over something). Thanks a lot for reading and commenting!

Fri, February 14th, 2014 1:36am

dianasanchez106

really nicely written!! it was easy to read and evverything flowed nicely!! Amazing job!

Thu, February 13th, 2014 11:18pm

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Thanks so much!:)

Fri, February 14th, 2014 1:32am

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