pain will last a lifetime

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

a poem about suicide and how it affects the people who are close to the one who commits suicide more than they can imagine

A girl lies bleeding on the blood soaked carpet
A knife in her hand, feeling so scared
The cut of death she chose to do
The pain is more intense than ever
Yet she still smiles
All goes grey and fuzzy
One last breath
Death
A figure rushes in and shakes her
All hope gone
They stand stands over her crying
Wishing her to live
Ambulance sirens everywhere
All pain over forever
For her at least
But for that figure
The pain will last a lifetime


Submitted: May 15, 2008

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Wobster

Wow, this is no exxageration, that is the best poem regarding death I have ever read. People always right about the dead but right at the end you indicate that the people still living will feel the pain forever, so true. Not many people see that, they see death as the end of all misery, but its only the end of their misery, everyone else will wonder why it happened? What kind of God lets people die or get so miserable that they kill themselves? Awesome poem, sorry for the long comments.

Thu, May 15th, 2008 8:55pm

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thank you very much... dont worry its nice you take the time to comment... and really the best poem on death? im sure there are much better but thank you very much... this is based on feelings that i had one time and what would have happened because i know what its like to have someone close kill themselves.... RIP uncle Richard

Sat, May 17th, 2008 9:55am

Trainman238

*crying* this is really really really sad :( :( :(

Sat, May 17th, 2008 7:22pm

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i never thought my poetry could cause people to cry... thanks for commenting

Sat, May 17th, 2008 12:24pm

Jbortti

You are right about this issue, suicide is not the solution. I'm not religious , but even then believe in suffering after death when someone suicide.

Mon, May 19th, 2008 2:19pm

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thanks for commenting

Mon, May 19th, 2008 9:38am

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