Round Two!

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

For Rhensis's contest of a lifetime round two! Hope you like it!

He likes someone else. He likes my best friend…he’s been flirting with my best friend for months! Thoughts ran through Sophie’s head at breakneck pace. She’d been thinking of Dylan all day since his best friend told her he liked her best friend, Kate, and was going to ask her out the next day. Now, she glumly walked to her waiting bus and climbed on, nodding at the cheerful bus driver on the way as he greeted her.

For the whole bus ride, she stared out the window and wondered how her life got to be this bad. Just a few weeks ago, Dylan had suddenly stopped liking her and dumped her with no warning. Now he teased her in class, called her dumb and ugly, and laughed at her when she tripped or god forbid, made the smallest mistake. Never mind that when they were dating she corrected him on innumerable occasions. That didn’t matter to him anymore. She didn’t matter.

And it wasn’t like she could just forget him. She loved him. Still. So she had retreated to gloomy solitude whenever he made fun of her or laughed. Her friends laughed at her when she cried, so she saved her tears for when she was alone. She felt like all she had was her schoolwork, which offered no condolence, even if all her teachers loved her. No one could replace Dylan.

Yet it seemed that he could replace her…and he was. Or, he was trying. Was she really that unimportant to him? Didn’t she mean anything? She was sure they were in love…maybe no the love of fairy tales, but the rushing, throbbing heart, jumping first love that should have lasted years longer.

The bus rolled down her street and squeaked to a stop in front of her house. She swung her small, bony frame out of her seat, strode down the hall, and descended the stairs. She was home.

She lived on a dirt road about three miles from the school. Her house was all green, courtesy of her father, who worked at an environmental firm. Thus, the ozone-friendly devices that they surrounded themselves with. He was always at work, so she often found herself alone in their enormous house. Her mother had gotten in a car crash a few months after Sophie was born, and before that she had run out on them, so she wouldn’t have been around if she lived, anyway.

She pushed open the door and entered her incredibly quiet house. The housekeeper had come earlier that day, so everything was extraordinarily clean, even for having just two residents of the house. After taking off her shoes and pouring herself a glass of milk, she climbed the spiral staircase to her bedroom, where she spread out her books and began to do her homework with great zeal.

Two and a half hours later, after finishing her homework and the book that she had been reading for precisely one day, Sophie stumbled down the stairs and fixed herself dinner. But as she placed the first piece of leftover lasagna in her mouth, a sudden wave of nausea overtook her and she ran to the garbage and spit it out. Dumping the rest in the compost, she ran upstairs crying.

In her room, she stared at herself in the floor length mirror located by the dresser. And all she saw was a dark, freckled brunette with a thin, bony frame that made people point and whisper whenever she traveled with her dad. She wore make-up to help her face look prettier, but she wasn’t nearly as pretty as her best friend. Kate was so much better than her and now Dylan knew it.

He knew that she was never pretty enough. He knew that she was never smart enough. He knew that she was never good enough for someone as great as him. And she couldn’t fool him any longer.


Submitted: June 22, 2011

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Rhensis

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Great entry! good luck;)

Thu, June 23rd, 2011 4:53am

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thanks! so happy i made it to round two!b :)

Fri, June 24th, 2011 6:24pm

arun

Oh dear it was so amazing. So good. So emotional. A moving piece. I liked it... Hats off to you...

Thu, June 30th, 2011 6:07pm

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thanks :)

Fri, July 1st, 2011 6:14am

AemmaBella

It's very sad :( I really hate when women think of themselves that way :'( Nice job

Thu, June 30th, 2011 6:36pm

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me too but sometimes it happens to the most talented, smart, and beautiful ones that really should never question that. for example, in the story, when i said people stared when she went places with her dad, though i couldn't say this in the right out, people were admiring her. she was actually really pretty.

Fri, July 1st, 2011 6:12am

SweetDreams01

arr, i feel really sorry for her! it was so realistic as well! well done:D

Thu, June 30th, 2011 7:08pm

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thanks :) hope i don't get voted off, this has been fun. though if i do, i think i did good enough to feel good, since it is my first competition on booksie.

Fri, July 1st, 2011 6:14am

commander218

Man...this was pretty good. I'm still trying to think why you were put up for elimination along with me. You're not giving me an easy time figuring this out (that's a good thing). There was lack of detail in mine, but it seems you did that well. I would say you're not missing anything. It may be that the plot was a little weak or there might be enough to get the reader's attention. Honestly, I don't see anything that more experience wouldn't fix. I really wish I could be of more help. You did good. I probably shouldn't say this: the voting will be close.

Thu, June 30th, 2011 10:50pm

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thanks for the compliments! i think it might be the plot being too weak too. and the fact that all the other people are really good. thanks for the support! :)

Fri, July 1st, 2011 6:00am

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