Cruelty of Greed

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

From a place unknown!


From a ripple of change can a storm arise
Just one ray of hope makes me lose my mind
Never changing, always there
My tender heartstings begin to tear
I pour out my heart
Give you my soul
In one fell swoop 
You leave but a hole
What is the reason
What have i done
Do i deserve this
or is it your fun
You scream and shout
You ball your eyes
You leave me here
To fall into demise
I dont understand it
Or see how it works
i must have done something
for you to cause me this hurt
You leave me behind
An explanation i need
For the first time ever
I see the cruelty of Greed!

Submitted: February 13, 2012

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Brian W

A good poem with nice flow and rhyme..In the first stanza the lines seem to long compered to the rest of the poem.....Well written

Mon, February 13th, 2012 11:46pm


Thank again! I do know what you mean about the start seeming out of place, i tried reducing it down but couldn't make it work. Will revisit it at a later point in hope of an epiphany!

Mon, February 13th, 2012 4:00pm

Brian W

Maybe do this and then add two more lines????

From a ripple of change
Can a storm arise
Just one ray of hope
Makes me lose my mind

Never changing always there
My tender heartstrings begin to tear

But it is only my opinion and I am not qualified....Neverless a good poem

Tue, February 14th, 2012 12:09am


Hmm, could break the first stanza into two and expand upon it rather than try and shrink it to match. Will have a think on it.
Looking at some of your poems, your opinion is appreciated, not being qualified doesn't necessarily cause you to be worse off!
Thanks again!

Mon, February 13th, 2012 4:14pm

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