Poem by: Gepikwhereis
Genre: Science Fiction
Submitted: January 09, 2012
Text is in comments
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We have got a natural satellite called 'MOON',
Which, I know won't go away too soon.
It has received many blows,
From stony heavenly objects,
And, therefore it has got many sockets!
Man has walked on it,
And might also have sat on it!
It reflects us the Sun's light,
Thus making the Taj Mahal in India, wonderful in sight.
Man's foot-print is there on the moon,
And, I know, it won't go away too soon.
Nice beat, like something you could read to a class of kids to the sound of music (that is meant to be a compliment).
The second line is unusually short though, and made it difficult to get into the rhythm of the poem and a bit jarring (I got into it in Line 4). The rest of the poem flowed well. I'm curious as to why it is in the comments section and not on the actual page.
The most interesting image was the Taj Mahal under the moonlight. I have never seen it, but I bet it looks mesmerizing.
The beat was great. Why was it in the comment section and not the page? It was flow was smooth and not forced.
Anyway, thanks for the comments.
I tried to write this poem in the actual page for many times, but it simply refused to come there, why I don't know myself.And that's why I've got it here.
Cleverly written prose. You need a computer!
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