Bable

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

There is a lot of us talking. Is anyone listening?

You don't see me the way that I see you.
You only tell me where I've gone wrong.
To tell the truth you’d never believe me.
So I sit, and write my songs.
 
Can this be the Tower of Babel
or another hell long forgotten?
Can this be the depth of our madness
or has the path turned rotten?
 
We live our lives separate but evil.
And tell ourselves never ending lies.
Much too proud to admit to our blindness.
A dying ember behind our eyes.
 
Have the gods abandoned us?
Is this the setting sun?
How can we ever walk in peace,
when all we do is run?


Submitted: July 26, 2009

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SLJONES

what a amazing poem i love the last part,,how can we walk in peace when all we do is run,,,,loved it well done sj

Sun, July 26th, 2009 12:02pm

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Thanks for the comment sj.

Sun, July 26th, 2009 1:05pm

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TaylorShaeee

A very intresting poem! Beautifully written. The first stanza is my favorite, it held my attention most. I would be happy to read more. :]

Sun, July 26th, 2009 9:56pm

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Thank you Taylor.

Sun, July 26th, 2009 5:12pm

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Felicia Marie

Love the tower reference in relation to 'us'.

Tue, July 28th, 2009 4:49pm

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Thank You Marie.

Tue, July 28th, 2009 9:25pm

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Snow412

This is an amazing feat of poetry. This is a place you have much insight in indeed (I'm certain you have insight in other places as well).

We are a self-destructive race that never turns back or questions why...until the poet points it out. :)

Great work here; full of depth and a blinding truth--we will be our own demise due to ignorance and apathy.

Mon, August 3rd, 2009 2:42am

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Thanks again Snow. We can add denial to that list of self destructive behaviors. This age of greed must pass if there will be any hope for us. There's getting to be too many of us rats in this cage called earth to continue being selfish.

As for insight, well, I read a lot. Gave up that narrow view that the TV presents. I have also had a more than my share to sort out. Won't go there or create a tabloid on Booksie. Interestlingly, my entire family and I all fall into the small category of being idealists when testing with the personality profiles that they teach about in the nursing schools. Using the political viewpoint test at www.politicalcompass.org I always seem to land right around Ghandi politically, way left of center. It sort of puts you on the sidelines in mainstream life. You become an observer because your opinion either does not fit the model or goes straight over peoples heads. So, I read, mainly about what people believe in, from religion to UFO's and all points in between. There's a lot to be said for life experience but I have already passed two hundred words and this is becoming an essay... Peace to you Snow. Thank you for the thoughtful and generous comments.

Mon, August 3rd, 2009 2:02am

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Gentlespirit

This is a very honest piece.

It is not accusatory, but introspective and reflective.

I truly believe, that we are children learning lessons all the time, and as we grow, becoming more and more aware, then we will reach full enlightenment.

already you will see many people who are idealists, many who share Ghandi's traits and the traits of other such notables.....kindeer, gentler people, who are selfless and giving.

Never doubt things are changing!

Mon, August 24th, 2009 7:52am

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Honesty. Crucial for healing. How can we ever begin to heal if we are not honest, starting with ourselves. Ego must be the first soldier to fall in this battle. We must then take ownership of ourselves and not point the finger of blame, even when it is obvious that others are mistaken. Easier said than done in our competitive world.

Mon, August 24th, 2009 6:41am

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Mistress of Word Play

Wonderful song of life you wrote. The highs and lows of mankind. No God has not left us we left God. I like this type of write gives a soul insight into the writers mind. Great job. Susan :)

Wed, January 6th, 2010 7:29pm

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No No don't tramp around in my mind. I have been out of it for years and have just gotten things put in places where I like them 8-)

Thank you Susan. I appreciate your opinion and commentary.

Wed, January 6th, 2010 8:27pm

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