Poem by: Ghonesis
Submitted: January 05, 2012
It's like I return from the dead.
When I wake up...
And lay in bed.
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i like it, nice job
Thanks a lot. =)
Stormy Aura Llewellyn
I'm going to make an attempt at a criticism for once. XP I'm not really too good at that.
I'm not sure I'm a fan of the word savvy in there, but that's personal preference. ;) I think you could find a word in your expanse vocabulary that could better fill your place.
Now for the nice stuff. :) I love the ending so terribly much. I understand how you feel (as you know)and I love how succinctly you express yourself. You leave so much to the mind of the reader without really leaving anything at all.
You're just flat out talented. (:
You're right, the word savvy gives an unfitting humorous tone to that stanza. I took 2 minutes to think of a word that rhymes with heavy, and this was all that I could think of that sort of suits.
My vocabulary might not be as expanse as you think. ;)
Anyway, thanks for reading. =D
Violet dusk justice finn darrot
That is cool, as you said it is just your thoughts. The ending is the best...like it!
I wanted to try one-worded lines. Short poems are the best.
Thanks for reading. =)
Wow, yet again, another amazing poem by you lol. I agree with Story Aura, about the ending, loved it!
Well, it's important that the ending is good. I'm glad you liked it. =)
Thanks for reading. ;)
This is cool, different, I like the format, and it's clever.
Formats are my speciality. =P
Thanks for the comment.
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