This is a poem I wrote with full intention of doing what I described but as you can see when you read it I calmed down by the end and saw sense.

Romeo and Juliette?
 
Nothing felt better than the warm, crimson river flowing down her arm,
The knife in her hand was not her enemy but her best friend.
 
There were deep rivers running down her throat,
Down her wrists yet she did not scream,
She sat and silently cried.
 
No one was home, no one was there to ease her pain,
Even if she had not been alone she would have felt it.
 
Her family don’t care they ignore her,
Her friends don’t really understand
So she sees no real reason to live.
 
No concerned about stopping the blood flow
She deeply cuts a vein, this time she screams,
The pain is unbearable yet she carries on cutting.
 
Just when you think she’s going to stop and see sense
She goes one step further and plunges her bleeding wrists into boiling water.
 
She’s overcome by sheer agony and can’t stand anymore,
The waters so hot and the bloods flowing so fast she knows she won’t last long.
 
To make sure there was no chance of being rescued she drove the knife deeply into her heart and collapses on the floor.
 
A crimson pool quickly formed around her,
A symbol of her regret and betrayal.
 
Her ex walks in and finds his love lying dead on the floor,
Her feelings for her never faded, time only made them stronger.
 
The poor grief stricken man couldn’t think straight,
He took the knife from the corpse of his love
And takes his own life so he can be with her.
 
Hopefully in death they will be happy.


Submitted: April 01, 2009

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Freddo

Woah! Oh s***!!!!!!!!! That was freaking intense!!!!!!! But it was amazing!!!!!!!!! I loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Thu, April 2nd, 2009 2:35am

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Thanks I can't help it it's just the way I write

Mon, April 13th, 2009 2:14am

thegirlwhofallsdownalot

that was amazing, intense, super good, i love that you brought an interesting testimony to a classic, i always thought that the classic love suicide was beautiful, but this way, it seems different, like a mistake, twistedly beautiful and amazingly intriguing.

Sat, April 18th, 2009 6:52pm

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Thanks I love to add a twist to classic ideas. That and write about what can be deemed taboo subjects. Anyways I'm glad you liked it.

Mon, April 20th, 2009 2:15am

XxalexandraxX

oh.my.effen.gawd.
you have inspire me to write something like this!!!
ahhhhh!! thnk you!
ur amazing!!!
sososososo painful but yet...
beautiful....
*cries a little*
wahhhhh ;)
please check out some of my stuff! its alot like urs!!
*on knees begging w/ puppy eyes*

Fri, May 15th, 2009 2:37am

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Thank you you don't know haow happy you comment has made me *big grin* and sure I'll check out your work :)=

Fri, May 15th, 2009 1:06am

JustBryon

To think that you were going to actually do that... It made me envision every bit of it with more care than there would normally be. Deep, passionate, and perfect. Love it.

Sat, May 16th, 2009 5:25am

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Thanks and yes I truely was. I'm just glad I haven't been suicidal in a while. it's no fun :,(

Mon, May 18th, 2009 12:21am

JenDamsel

Aww soo sad! don't ever have those ugly thoughts!
these is an excellent poem one of your best, i can feel you put lots on portraying the feeling into your words.
;-x ( that's suppose to be a kiss but i looks more like a dead guy lol)

Thu, May 21st, 2009 5:21pm

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Thanks :D

Thu, May 21st, 2009 10:38am

Sunshine Raines

such pain such emotions I felt them all as I read this piece. you write so beautifully. I was captavated. S.R.

Sat, May 30th, 2009 8:32am

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Thanks :D

Tue, June 2nd, 2009 12:18am

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