the fog discover every where
and the cloud in the sky very larg
the rain until now i didn't hear
and the weather cold very much
Our heart is empty ...from love
and the weather make us feel not hot enough.......
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well hay ..... a few thing i would like
to say......it's not hot today
it's not what we hopped to be like yesterday
so hey....nothing will make us
feel save ........unless you love today
or you stay by yesterday
i want to love but my search isn't enough.....
i will get warm when i see the love in every where
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but here we are again
with the music playin'
everything is able to change
and every bad fly away
out in the storm and the cold place
inside at the dance and love air
nothing change.........i will still cold
unless the sun won't shining again
our heart is not able to steam....
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well hay ..... a few thing i would like
to say......it's not hot today
it's not what we hopped to be like yesterday
so hey....nothing will make us
feel save ........unless you love today
or you stay by yesterday
the cold make our hearts like ice cream freez.....
but i don't thing it's able to warm again it's freezing ice hearts
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we saw the rainbow at the sky
the sun shinning with different stars
the cold disapear and the warm appear
and there's no fog or cloud we dislike
when we love , the warm be in everywhere
our wishes come true since yesterday
and everybody happy and scream
like freezing ice hearts and steam
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well hay ..... a few thing i would like
to say......it's not hot today
it's not what we hopped to be like yesterday
so hey....nothing will make us
feel save ........unless you love today
or you stay by yesterday
i want to love but my search isn't enough.....
i will get warm when i see the love in every where
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well hay ..... a few thing i would like
to say......it's not hot today
it's not what we hopped to be like yesterday
so hey....nothing will make us
feel save ........unless you love today
or you stay by yesterday
the cold make our hearts like ice cream freez.....
but i don't thing it's able to warm again it's freezing ice hearts
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Submitted: April 22, 2011
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Comments
Hi Ronnie!
It is a very nice work. You do a pretty good job of creating a reader response through the use of the images you write about; this is important.
I was a bit lost in some of the grammar and word usage but the best thing took away from that. This was that you put yourself into it.
Did I recieve the right message? A heart is cold without love. But a heart can be cold also because of love?
Like I previously said besides the few spelling mistakes this poem is pretty good :D
Nice work and keep it up!
Click!:D
Love the outline and the shape of it! Great poem :)
Sun, August 28th, 2011 3:45pmnice.
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RamonaWriter
Awwww, love it. Keep up the good work
Sat, April 23rd, 2011 6:02am