Just some inspiration from the underground place of rest

Entombed, concealed

from all above

that still feels

Sealed, entrapped

forever motionless

on your back

Tucked away

in a place that's

dark

hidden and alone

welcome to

your new home

Able to rest

all is quiet and still

never mind the cold

concrete

you won't get a chill

Closed off, lowered down

covered up, under ground

You can be happy

it's safe

you won't be disturbed

in that tight space

This is where you end.

Welcome home


Submitted: April 03, 2009

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Itsuwari

I love the loose rhyme and flow, very effective in conveying the emotions behind this piece. And a brilliant piece all in all, the ending line was especially potent, nearly palpable. Well done.

Fri, April 3rd, 2009 4:01am

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Thank you so much. What a great comment. I appreciate the read

Thu, April 2nd, 2009 9:15pm

Anastasia Starlena

Very profound with lots of lonely imagery. Welcome home to solitude. Great piece.

Take Care,
Ana

Fri, April 3rd, 2009 4:52am

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Thank you so much Ana. 'Lonely energy', that's a good way to describe that. Solitude was what I got out of this too, but not in a sad way, in a content way. It's comfortable. Thanks for commenting

Fri, April 3rd, 2009 5:32am

Gentlespirit

A salutary tale indeed Alex. Welcome home was the power packed punchline! A fine piece with cold imagery indeed.

to be sealed in a tomb like this would be scary for anyone. However, all that lies within these cold confines is the corrupting outer body (the vehicle we inhabit or reside in for the duration of our physical life) Meanwhile we are off....... our spirit has already gone and is floating and dancing in the etheric field on my way to my 'true home'

Nice warming thought that :0) My body may be worm-bait, but I will not be......I AM more than the body that I inhabit :0) I am not just my body, not my rain, nor my eyes etc.......I like everyone else on this planet, are so very much more.

Fri, April 3rd, 2009 8:15am

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Great interpretation and opinions on this. You have a way of making it sound almost euphoric, as if it is the greatest thing that could happen to us. Maybe it is. Thanks for the comment

Fri, April 3rd, 2009 5:35am

Cherry Berry

This was a perfect was to sum up the ending of the end. Well penned. I enjoyed reading this piece.

xox
Cherri

Fri, April 3rd, 2009 3:53pm

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Thank you so much. I'm happy that you enjoyed it. One thing I like to think about is that it is really not the end of anything, but the beginning of something else

Fri, April 3rd, 2009 11:08am

Flash

Closed off,lowered down
Covered up, under ground.
Sounds so final! Thank God for the salvation plan and Jesus! Never to know darkness! In fact, under ground is not the final spot for the body either! The body will be raised and transformed to the perfect body someday and joining back with my spirit! Won't that be grand. But during our time on earth, yes that is the resting point!
I loved how you made underground to sound final, scary, solitary, like doom and gloom and then turn it all around and make it feel cozy and warm like a home. Good turn about! Nice change up! Well done!

Fri, April 3rd, 2009 7:33pm

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Thank you so much. You have a nice take on this as well. I appreciate the read

Fri, April 3rd, 2009 7:29pm

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