O Passerby..

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

For my dear Dr.Strangelove ^-^

If somebody is watching over you, eventually you know it by instinct, this is human nature.

written yesterday in a depressed mood, i personally dont agree with the first line of the last stanza but it was required for the whole.

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O Passerby…

 

Don’t you feel

The undraped windows

Of that old house

Are staring at you…

 

I can barely breathe

When I sense your absence

And the truth that you are just a passerby

Who grabbed me by the heart strings..

 

And then I wish we had never met

Now I will never be again what I used to be

Something inside of me has gone entirely missing

And I don’t remember what the world was before you..

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Submitted: April 25, 2012

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Yume chan

Hey there pleasure^^ this was another wow poem. I could feel the empty emotions of someone being missing. And how love once known can change one's world once its gone. I also love the pictures you used. They really are great. Once again brilliant job ! Keep writing^^ and KMU!

Wed, April 25th, 2012 7:16pm

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Hey Yume, thanks for being the first and this lovely comment. Love is like alchemy, it can change you for good and forver :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 3:40am

Ghonesis

Great.. I love that 'love that can never be'-theme. ^^ And the pictures really added effect, great work. =)

Wed, April 25th, 2012 7:28pm

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Oh yeah! THANK YOU :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 3:38am

Pharaoh888

How sad :( Unrequited Love can always be a strong and agonizing tie. I like the pictures, they paint a great atmosphere for the poem, and the words are really touching and heart breaking. Great Poem once again! Keep em Comin', I really enjoy them ^_^

Wed, April 25th, 2012 7:42pm

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Thank you so much :) They will keep coming for sure :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 3:35am

memoryblue

This says more than the words read. Such meaning behind the ides of an abandonned house and how you feel like this empty disgarded memory. Beautiful :)

Wed, April 25th, 2012 7:53pm

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Oh thats a beautiful comment :) Thank you :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 3:34am

TheCorpseHasPetals

This happens sometimes I guess. I like the pictures.

Wed, April 25th, 2012 7:59pm

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Thank you :) I like your pen name :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 3:33am

My Overactive Imagination

yes, my requests are closed, but i couldnt resist this! wow! i can't decide which stanza ifs my favourite between the second and the third, but i think, it is the third. its just so powerful. the final line, though, i think is the best line in the entire poem. its expressing loss and guilt and regret and emptiness all at once... a completly beautiful overload of emotion! sorry for the babble!! i liked it :Dxxx

Wed, April 25th, 2012 8:17pm

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Ohhhh! so nice of you... well i like the third stanza :) it looks pretty :)

Thanks for coming by and beautiful comments :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 3:30am

LupusAmator

Aww, this is so sweet... and sad :( But I still loved it!! Keep up this amazing work!

Wed, April 25th, 2012 9:21pm

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Thank you :) :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 3:28am

Nichola Palermo

Hi, I love your work, so passionate so unreal, full of life. Sad but strong. Beautiful

Wed, April 25th, 2012 9:44pm

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Thank you :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 3:22am

betsyt

I absolutely love this poem! One of the best I've read!

Wed, April 25th, 2012 11:05pm

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Wow! Thank you :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 3:45am

amnehquti

i loved it grear job

Wed, April 25th, 2012 11:32pm

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Thank you :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 3:46am

onlyinred

Another great poem! All throughout this poem I felt a sense of longing, of yearning. Like staring down at something, waiting for something and it's far out of reach, or like life, it just goes on and on, and this person just watches it go by or yearns for that. I don't know if these are my feelings, or you meant this poem to seem like that! :)
This poem felt lonely... :( I really loved the pictures at the beginning and end. It gave me something to think about. Like, another perspective. At the top it's lonliness, and that's what I felt and what I imagined the tone as. But at the bottom, the picture is imaginative, and fantasy like. Like daydreaming. So then I thought about the poem being like that and read it over again. This time, it felt a bit less sad. It felt..more dreamy. Watching daydreams and thoughts just pass by as one could contemplate out the window of an old house. Very lovely poem! I really loved it! The pictures are amazing and really give diffrent perspectives of thinking on it. :D

Thu, April 26th, 2012 2:01am

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Thank you soooo much dear... basically, the poem is about depression (thats not a nice word and unpoetic too, slam), that i had gone through the day before yesterday.. it is a confusion, what to do, what to do type... like 'if a want to take a thing, i take it' type of bratty attitude and then realizing that this individual is not a 'thing', he is even grander, more magnificent than one's dreams, like it is a blasphemy to treat him like any other gentleman around... so, yeah i agree with each word you said..

Thu, April 26th, 2012 3:58am

Vikrant

Pain, agony and people left behind to suffer to eternity. Good poem !

Thu, April 26th, 2012 2:04am

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Thank you :) I am not gonna suffer for eternity though... eternity is tooo biggg :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 4:03am

Jimbobi

Hi Ruby, I'm wondering, are you referring to yourself as the undraped house that stares unbashfully out at the love it once had? The feeling of being unable to breathe in the absence of a loved one, yes really understandable. And even more painful is spotting that person, who was once so close, now become a passerby, a stranger. I can say that I'm no stranger to the sentiments you've expressed! Thanks for sharing again!

Thu, April 26th, 2012 5:30am

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Heya Jimmie, what you said just reminded me the story/classic "The Yellow Face" in sherlock holmes series. This man passes by a house and sees a yellow face in the window of an empty house... hahah if you havent read it, you must, i am not gonna tell who was the yellow face...

it simply means, that if someone is watching you from that window, it means the house is no longer empty and yet you cant see you who is seeing you... it is a scientific fact, if someone is looking at you, your mind registers the fact in the subconscious and slowly it starts impacting your conscious mind too. (watching discovery channel too much hahah) when somebody is thinking about you, you connect to them instantly but subconsciously, because all humanity is connected already with an unseen thread of unity (this is practical QP, and brain waves XD)... so yeah, thats it :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 4:26am

simplyema

Hi!! You know what??? I just noticed that... ALL YOUR WORKS ARE VERY AMAZZZZZING!!especially your poems.. you hreally have that natural talent of yours.. Keep up the good work!!

Thu, April 26th, 2012 6:46am

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Thank you so much for liking my works :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 4:42am

Insane Membrane

hey ... nice work and you have such lovely pictures

Thu, April 26th, 2012 8:49am

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hey... thank you :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 4:43am

ashi17

Hollowness from inside because of missing someone or something could be noticed from this poetry. Short but strong feeling are conveyed, very well written, good work honey :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 11:03am

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Thank you honey :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 4:50am

RazorBlade

Very nice work. I can feel the emotions within the room... Good job.

Thu, April 26th, 2012 12:39pm

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THANK YOU :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 8:56am

declan mckimm

This was very well written and well thought-out I can tell, but unfortunately, this was not me type of poems that I am interested in. IT DOES NOT MEAN IT WAS BAD, but it means that it was not for me. Other people would appreciate it more than I do. Anyway, could you take a peek at some of my work? I'd love an opinion on some of it. Thanks :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 3:22pm

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THIS SUCKER IS ALSO NOT FOR ME BECOZ I AM NO LONGER DEPRESSED... SO CHEERS BABY :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 8:57am

PurpleDream19

I love this! So deep and emotional. This is amazing...really beautiful :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 6:36pm

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Thank you so much dear... OMG, so many comments, this passer by seems to be irresistible ;)

Fri, April 27th, 2012 3:11am

Carefulx

Awesome poem. :3 Sad but it was a good read. ^-^

-Allison

Thu, April 26th, 2012 6:54pm

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Thank you

Fri, April 27th, 2012 3:14am

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