Waiting........

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

"Youuu Mischievous.. my heart is your slave"

written this sunday with another poem, the picture is its essential part...

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Hold my hand darling, you will soon realize

You have not heard.. the sweetest throb yet

 

I have waited for centuries in these stones and pillars

I remember all the stars that fell and left their pale dust on me

I know the rhythms of winds, and they often whisper just your name

Oh how I want to step down on grass and dance beyond all restraints.

 

I keep my doors open, see the passage is still bright

Because I know an angel visited, in the dark cloak of night

His shadow was golden, he left a lock of curls behind

So quietly he passed by, ohh my eyes followed him for miles...

 

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Submitted: April 03, 2012

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Blackmirror

I love this poem! It seemed to flow very well for me. :)

Tue, April 3rd, 2012 5:24pm

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Thank you :)

Wed, April 4th, 2012 4:12am

LoneWolf93

Very nice poem. You're very talented :) x

Tue, April 3rd, 2012 5:34pm

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Thank you :)

Wed, April 4th, 2012 4:12am

Alice Lovegood

Absolutely loved this! Breathtaking! I'm so glad I checked it out! x

Tue, April 3rd, 2012 7:18pm

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Thanks :)

Wed, April 4th, 2012 4:13am

Kobey

I agree the poem flowed very nicely! Very interesting poem!

Tue, April 3rd, 2012 7:41pm

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Thank you :)

Wed, April 4th, 2012 4:13am

Archia

Nice poem. I think the last line though could use a little work. It doesn't keep with the flow of the rest of the poem and seems a bit awkwardly placed.
There's quite an interesting idea to it, and it had almost this soft flowing tone to it, quite good. I really enjoyed that second stanza, it was beautiful.

Tue, April 3rd, 2012 11:10pm

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Thank you :) (the last line will not be changed, feedback very much appreciated)

Wed, April 4th, 2012 4:15am

poetrypallet


Lovely Poem flow :)

Wed, April 4th, 2012 11:17am

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Thank you :)

Wed, April 4th, 2012 12:05pm

Jimbobi

Hi Ruby, it makes me think that there is the soul of a woman, or perhaps a goddess within the statue(s). She watches the centuries pass, encased in stone. In a way I feel sad for her, she wants to step down on the grass again but can't...a bit like Medusa. The angel that passed by, could it be the lover speaks of? Whose name the wind whispers to her? Perhaps she has never touched this angel and he's never felt the throb of her heart. All she can do is watch him as he travels for miles. The thought of it makes me feel sad for her again, but she doesn't seem sad. Perhaps she's found some contentment with just watching, waiting and feeling. Perhaps I'm rambling too. Magnificent, Ruby!

Wed, April 4th, 2012 2:54pm

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Perfect Jimmie, exactly the same emotion what i felt while writing this umm ... thing, you are not rambling and you know this XD :)

One thing i can say truly is that your one comment is worth fifty others because it gave me so much confidence in my expressive abilities... if there is at least a single person who can correctly interpret one's words, it is enough evidence that they were well said..

Thank you soooo much :)

something i may add is that we cant compare the narrator to Medusa, because Meduse is associated with murderous and evil temptation, the word Medusa is used for innocent women sometimes too but only in such circumstances when she becomes an object of desire for someone and he is unable to access her and then manages to shift the blame on her finally. So overall the term has more to do with lust than love and that cannot be applied to ethereal feelings.

You are so right about the contentment on watching and waiting, your line just reminded me Milton's poem "On his blindness"

I am soooo sorry for making you sad here and there but you just made my day :) happier.

Wed, April 4th, 2012 12:25pm

stuckinthemoment

I don't usually like poems, but this moved me. It was lovely, thank-you for telling me about it!
you have some real talent, I'll tell you that sweeite!
keep it up... look forward to more!
xoxo

Wed, April 4th, 2012 9:02pm

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Awww Thank You :)

Thu, April 5th, 2012 12:08am

Audrey Wilson

It flows very well, and you have a very good vocabulary!

Wed, April 4th, 2012 9:08pm

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Thanks :)

Thu, April 5th, 2012 12:09am

Geekie

I'm not normally a big poetry fan, but this was a great poem, it flowed really well and I loved the meaning behind the poem itself ~ x

Wed, April 4th, 2012 9:19pm

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Thank you so much :)

Thu, April 5th, 2012 12:09am

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