Breakthroughs

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Fantasy  |  House: Booksie Classic

Sometimes finding yourself is harder than what people make it out to be.

The light, it’s there,

finally in your hand,

you can see it clearly now, 

but don’t forget

to remove the regret

and simply ask yourself how.

***

How did I get here?

How do I see

what once wasn’t clear to me?

Who is that girl,

that girl in the light,

does she want me to be free?

***

You reach out,

and so does she,

you feel a strong connection,

but then you frown,

so does she,

you fall,

she does too,

you’re looking at your reflection.

***

You try to smile, 

and then it shows

how different you really are,

because when you grin

and peer at her

she can’t move her mouth.

***

You force a cheer,

she sobs with fear,

and you make a realization,

you punch on cue

and she mimics you

with no obligation.

***

With fury,

with might,

with a golden light,

you both slam into the glass,

you need to see

what the other can't be,

to break through to their past.


Submitted: July 26, 2015

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Jack Motley

I like that the first two groups are beautifully song-like lyrical, and that it becomes a poem about knowing yourself along with you.

Good work, Hanorbi!

Sun, July 26th, 2015 8:54pm

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Thank you, Jack!

Sun, July 26th, 2015 2:38pm

Whiskey Charlie

I know the feeling, Hanorbi. I definitely look better in my imagination than I do in my mirror.

Sun, July 26th, 2015 9:13pm

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Yep, exactly. It's the unfortunate truth. Thanks for the read, Whiskey!

Sun, July 26th, 2015 2:39pm

Jeff Bezaire

Another knockout, man. Love the concept behind this one. It feels like something inspired by a dream (perhaps?). "You need to see what the other can't be" sums up a large part of our lives, I think. Struggling to find ourselves, to figure out what we're supposed to be in our careers, in our lives is difficult, and sometimes, with some people, it's a never-ending battle. It wasn't until I was 23/24 that I figured out what career I wanted to pursue, and even then, it wasn't a definite "I can do this and have fun with it for the rest of my life!" sort of thing. Knowing yourself is easy for everyone because we live with ourselves, but truly, deeply understanding ourselves is hard. Thinking of the future, some decisions seem like easy ones to make, until you actually consider them and the process of achieving that choice, and suddenly you realize maybe that's not the right choice afterall. It's difficult to see your reflection when you're staring into a one-way mirror. You don't always get to see in yourself what you want to see.

Sun, July 26th, 2015 9:41pm

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No, not a dream. It would be a really cool dream if it was! I don't actually know where this one came from. It's a neverending battle with a large amount of people, that's for sure. Figuring out a job is hard. Right now I'm leaning towards something medical with the writing and maybe art on the side, or even as just hobbies. I just need to get through the Hell that is highschool. Thanks for the great comment as always, Jeff!

Sun, July 26th, 2015 2:56pm

Skylar Kristofer

You know, I used to do a meditation exercise that my mom taught me (don't judge) that was very similar to this. It wasn't quite like it, it was more of an inner connection with your past self. She told me it was more like coming to terms with your past to find out who you are right now, and who you can turn out to be in the future. While there wasn't any broken glass at the end, it was similar in the fact that you were looking at yourself, but not through a mirror (in my mind, being the nerd I am, it was much like Naruto and the Nine-Tails meeting for the first time). She told me to imagine being weightless and free to explore the unending paths within myself and to think of the limitless potential I have. And you know what? It truly worked. I feel fine now. I feel like I've found myself. And if it weren't for reading this, I probably would have forgotten about it. So thank you so much for writing this, it really speaks to me on a semi-personal level.

Sun, July 26th, 2015 9:47pm

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No judgement here lol. That's an interesting exercise and I'm glad it worked for you. I think the hardest thing in life is finding yourself and being happy about it. You're welcome for writing it and I thank you for reading! I'm pleased to hear it worked on a personal level :)

Sun, July 26th, 2015 2:59pm

Grammarbully7

That was...deep. Your writing style is very professional and it's very experienced. Your emotions reflect with your every word, can you tell me how you write poems?

Mon, July 27th, 2015 11:58am

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I just do. Music's a big influence and I just let it talk for me. This one I wrote when listening to a heavenly song I recently discovered in maybe 20 minutes... Thank you for saying those things about my writing, it means so much :D

Mon, July 27th, 2015 12:15pm

B Douglas Slack

Everyone freaks out a bit at looking into a mirror. Nobody wants to see themselves as others see them. It's a fact of nature. Once, in Thailand, I tape recorded a man playing a musical instrument and then played it back to him. It was the very first time he'd ever heard himself. He said it sounded like his son, not him. ~Tom

Mon, July 27th, 2015 3:02pm

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It's weird how we sound different to ourselves on tape than we do in our heads. Must've been cool for the guy. Thank you for the read, Tom!

Mon, July 27th, 2015 12:16pm

DLCannon

This is very deep! It's as if they were 2 fighting lovers, but it's a story about a woman fighting a mirror. Very brilliant!

Tue, July 28th, 2015 9:11pm

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What an interesting perspective on it... I wouldn't have thought of that. Thank you, Cannon!

Tue, July 28th, 2015 2:24pm

Evelyn Mason

Fantastic! I wish I had more to say but that pretty much sums it up for me. Very nicely written and told.

Wed, July 29th, 2015 7:40pm

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Thank you much, Evelyn!

Wed, July 29th, 2015 1:09pm

Mr Watson

Being an identical twin, I see my image in a different light to most, we are both individuals, different temperaments, finding who you really are, now that takes some doing, every day we learn something new, taking that onboard is learning itself !

Fri, July 31st, 2015 8:22pm

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Woah, that's so cool; I'm glad you could relate to this on that kind of level! I would never have thought that you had an identical twin, so that's neat. Thank you for the read and comment!

Fri, July 31st, 2015 3:59pm

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