A heart shaped hole in each of my lungs,
a star shape graved in my chest,
chocolate stringed in spinal rungs
and dough inside, compressed.
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A sticky blend of warming tastes,
a scent that’s like no other,
a cookie of the finest pastes
is I, the one you smother.
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My rising intones,
my fleeting bread bones,
I expand when out of the oven,
and when you take smite
with your very first bite,
you’ll join the bakery’s coven.
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A baker of large nobility,
a tray of hardened steel,
these items of wide utility
yet I can’t change how I feel.
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A circle, bland, round and brown,
a treat when looked from afar,
but when you delve, you’ll find a frown,
a grimace in a smiling star.
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I need some change, I want a form,
to make my mixture flutter,
so now I ask you to remove my norm:
will you be my cookie cutter?
Submitted: August 21, 2015
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I am now hungry. lol Those opening stanzas really got me in the mood for some treats, but those last two stanzas drive the message of the poem home, regardless of my growling stomach. A clever means of illustrating the desire for individuality. The first stanza is great for showing the components that make the cookie, but don't necessarily distinguish it from other cookies, much like people - we all have the same innards and basic setup, but it's what's on the outside and what we feel on the inside that distinguish us as our own self.
Fri, August 21st, 2015 5:02pm
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Everyone saying that they're hungry is making me hungry :( lol. I don't know where I got the idea for this, really. I wanted to do something with a random thing and cookies popped into my brain. Then the whole individuality thing came from that, and then I wrote it and I really liked it. I hope your stomach manages to quiet down a bit, but now that I'm hungry I'm gonna go make a sandwich or something
Fri, August 21st, 2015 10:25am
Dont be mad at me when i say im hungry now because thats what you should have expected after using cookie in your title XD. Anyway, Nicely done! You're really diffrent from most booksie poets and i think you can make a career out of this. Seriously awesome job! Your the best ive seen so far :D.
Fri, August 21st, 2015 5:29pm
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Holy crap, thank you! Maybe I could, but right now I just love doing it as a hobby. I greatly appreciate your words of encouragement, Decim!
Fri, August 21st, 2015 10:49am
I hunger now. Thanks, Hanorbi!
Fri, August 21st, 2015 5:48pm
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Go get some noms. You're very welcome :3
Fri, August 21st, 2015 10:51am
Hmmm. I saw this just a little differently - from the point of view of the Gingerbread man. Maybe I'm the strange one. ~Tom
Fri, August 21st, 2015 6:38pm
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I love your point of views and how they're always different. It's refreshing, that little difference you make in how you see things, and great to hear. Thank you for reading, Tom!
Fri, August 21st, 2015 6:23pm
Masterfully done, you rose to the occasion. Mine are like cheese straws compared to this ! : )
Fri, August 21st, 2015 8:08pm
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While I welcome the lovely praise, I feel as though my poems are like little cupcakes and yours are grand wedding cakes, filled with professionalism and a tiny bit of humor at times. Thank you much, Mr. W :)
Fri, August 21st, 2015 6:25pm
Amazing work brother. I love how the how the whole thing is just one giant metaphor. Plus, the entire message behind it is 100% true. This is like the type of stuff I hope to be able to write one day. Keep this up, my man, you're doing amazing.
Sat, August 22nd, 2015 2:36am
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Thank you, Melancholic (I love your username btw, idk if I've told you that). I focused primarily on keeping the metaphor throughout. Nice knowing I succeeded. Trust me, from what I've read of yours, you're definitely on your way. You're probably better than me, honestly. I'll try my best to hold up the quality for future works :)
Fri, August 21st, 2015 9:40pm
I see the baker as an artist and an expression of yourself. It's beautifully written.
Sun, August 23rd, 2015 2:20am
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Thank you much, Casual! That's a really unique perspective actually, got me thinking.
Sat, August 22nd, 2015 9:41pm
I enjoyed the metaphors. They show your creativity. I like how you open it with the heart shape for lungs and star for chest. The ending was interesting. How you said you want to change form. Is that true in real life? Or were you just trying to keep with the cookie cutter theme? Either way, well done. I read on your profile you want to enter a piece of work in school, or somewhere. I think this will be great. As I stated earlier, it shows creativity.
Tue, October 13th, 2015 6:02am
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Hey Lisa! I'm honored to get a comment from you, as we've yet to really talk on this site. That line definitely doesn't resemble the way I feel in any way; I wanted to keep with the theme while still giving some insight on how others may feel about themselves. Some people just need a helping hand. I'm going to be submitting a few pieces to the school magazine and this will be included in those for sure, seeing as how many people have commented about it. Thank you for your commentary. The fact that I was able to share so much creativity in your mind is fantastic and I appreciate you taking the time to read! :)
Tue, October 13th, 2015 3:17pm
Wow this is amazing. I love how you totally made the "cookie cutter" expression your own. You just commented on my poem saying you liked my imagery but you have gotten really good yourself. I like this one. You seem to be getting famous on here Hanorbi, ha; look at all these reads and comments.It's good to see. Try and keep up the good work. You have already written so many good pieces.
Thu, October 15th, 2015 12:03am
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Improvement's what I like to see, from both you and some from me :) that rhyme was completely unintentional, just by the way. I don't really know what's happening. I'm nothing special when it comes to writing (i literally started this summer) and my fanbase is huge now. It's very weird. I'll try my best to continue to please, even though I won't be able to make everyone happy :)
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This is so true, and wonderfully written! The last stanza is really beautiful in particular, and the question at the end is killer. I know I just had lunch, but the cookie metaphor is making me hungry again :) Awesome poem as usual!
Fri, August 21st, 2015 4:59pmAuthor
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Lol, thank you. I didn't intend for it to make you hungry, but I'll take it.
Fri, August 21st, 2015 10:16am