Glide

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Fantasy  |  House: Booksie Classic

A family can break and burn but some things can't be broken.

Art by Erisiar

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She kept me up,

he pulled me down,

she stayed afloat,

he stole the crown,

I wanted more,

I wanted less,

she begged for mercy,

he took off my dress,

she wouldn’t listen,

he wouldn’t care,

she was always glinting,

a cold, cold stare,

a child that wasn’t pure

who was born with the pain,

my baby sees,

my baby knows,

my baby fears my reign,

I can’t help but hurt,

I can’t help but love,

she tries to stop me,

I fall and run,

I take him with me,

that baby of mine,

fought for custody

when he'd crossed the line,

the punches he threw,

the cries I sprayed,

will forever be imprinted

in my sweet baby’s brain,

I can maybe make amends,

I can repay for my dues,

her skin like silk

that I couldn’t help but bruise,

I’m sorry, my dear,

I’ve realized it now,

that baby isn’t yours,

it’s ours,

and I vow;

I’ll never throw fists,

I’ll never force pain,

I’ll admit what I’ve done

and I’ll give up my reign

as the throne is shared

by a queen and a king,

a mom and a dad

that are sealed by a ring,

a baby in hand,

a groom and a bride;

Can we start this all over,

take our flight

and go glide?

She stared at me then,

but without all the cold,

I saw warmth and the love

in the words that I'd told,

He looked at me,

she rose me high,

he came up with me,

we went to the sky,

our hands interlocked

on this long windy ride,

an ocean, a flock,

together,

we glide.


Submitted: September 09, 2015

© Copyright 2022 H. Adams. All rights reserved.

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B Douglas Slack

I love the symmetry and symbolism in this poem, Hanorbi. The use of colors to set the two apart, at first, and then intermingling them at the end to show solidarity was a master stroke. ~Tom

Wed, September 9th, 2015 12:45am

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Thank you, Tom. I thought the colors were perfect for identifying different parties in a conversation like this, showing the highs and lows and the problems and solutions. Glad you liked it as always!

Tue, September 8th, 2015 6:03pm

Jeff Bezaire

I must admit, it's nice that there's a happy ending, but I personally would not go back to a person who'd abused me, especially with a child in the mix. That being said, it's a nice sentiment that the guy is changing his ways for love (if he's changing his ways) and admitting that he was wrong. The two different voices really give this piece power as does the imagery presented through both voices. Togetherness, a king and queen, is important in a relationship and in a family. Great poem, Hanorbi!

Wed, September 9th, 2015 5:20am

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I really tried with those colors lol. I didn't add them until I got to posting it so it was hard re-identifying who was who. I wasn't sure about the whole royalty metaphor for the baby and the family either so I'm glad you mentioned it. The good ending was also iffy, but I hate ending things on a sour note so I just had to.

Thu, September 10th, 2015 11:59am

zanybelle

Well, you can't help but smile reading the ending :)

Sombre events and complex dynamics, told with rhythmic realism... You keep the reader hooked until the finish, which shows talent. Thanks for sharing.

Also, love the colourfulness and artwork.

Wed, September 9th, 2015 7:11pm

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Smiling is good, I'm glad I made you grin :) It's so hard to keep someone hooked so I tried my best to do so, especially when I decide to write about a topic like this. The colo(u)rs and art gave it a little creative flare, I thought. I'm so happy you enjoyed!

Thu, September 10th, 2015 12:04pm

Tangelo

Wow there's just so much to this...the love, abuse, baby, and color. Then top it off with the royalty and the ocean view. I'm an advocate of happy endings, so I'm glad it worked out at the end :) Your section with the ring is nicely done and brings out that turning point well. The color thing at the end was also really sweet. Awesome job!

Thu, September 10th, 2015 10:32pm

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Thank you, Tangey! Tangey just sounds cooler than Tangelo, and if I knew somebody outside of the internet who's name was Tangelo, I'd call them Tangey. :p Thank you so much for the kind words, it means the world to me.

Fri, September 11th, 2015 1:29pm

Mr Watson

You showed your true colours in this piece Hanorbi. Expertly done. With a positive ending.

Fri, September 11th, 2015 8:19pm

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Maybe I did, Mr. W. Thank you for the read and wonderful comment :D

Fri, September 11th, 2015 1:31pm

Jack Motley

One of your best of some of the best poetry I've read on Booksie by the best--you--Hanorbi. Loved how you used the colors to alternate perspective, and how the rhymes kept coming in varied fashion.

Sat, September 12th, 2015 10:08pm

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I'm honored to be placed under some of the best in your opinion on Booksie... very strong words that make me doubt them, but some belief seeing as they're coming from you. I'm glad you enjoyed the colors, it was really fun to play and mess around with. Thank you thank you thank you... oh, and thank you :)

Sat, September 12th, 2015 8:11pm

Melancholic Wisdom

This was amazing, really good stuff. The topics you handled in this (abuse, divorce) are very tough to do but I think you did it amazingly. The whole thing was drenched in symbolism and it was amazing. I like how you used different colors to differentiate between the two of them. I like how it has a happy ending, but personally I wouldn't go back to someone who was abusive to me. Also, the artwork you included by Erisiar was absolutely beautiful and it fit the theme. You really showed your skills here, your so young but you have an immense amount of talent. Honestly you're one of my favorite people to read on this site. Amazing work as always! :D

Sun, September 13th, 2015 5:34pm

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I try my hardest! Thank you for saying I'm a favorite of yours, it's a good morale booster. I'm glad you noticed everything you touched on. Appreciate the comment and all :D

Tue, September 15th, 2015 12:31pm

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