The First Three

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Fantasy  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is the tale of the firsts, but what about the lasts?

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I’m high above you, up in the clouds,

meeting the very first of the free,

you can shout my name 

but there’s no stopping me now

as I’m here with the beginning three.

***

The world’s a creation,

one of mass proportions,

the universe expands even farther than we thought, 

our minds can’t control

what we ourselves can’t hold

as that’s Atlas’s duty to wrought.

***

He’s the first of the three,

the other two drifting,

the other two knowing of all,

I’ve tried to ask,

but they’ve simply blown past,

and any ideas of mine will fall.

***

These three stand solid, unmoving, unnerved,

of the chaos us humans have brought,

but there’s still time, there’s can be a curve,

a new beginning can be caught.

***

I’m running out of fumes

from my hot air balloon,

I’m surely descending fast.

I’m done with the first

and hopefully the worst,

as I’m moving on to the last.


Submitted: July 27, 2015

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Jack Motley

This is a fantasy world I could really learn more about. What are the Three Towers for? Who built them? Why? And why are they such icons? Are they merely towers? Or something more?

And who built them so high? Are they perhaps monasteries of skyfaring monks? Is our character temporarily joining the ranks of flying monks?

So many questions this piece of poetry and the image that prompted it themselves prompts.

This is a fantasy/low sci-fi novel in its own right. 'Sky Monks'?

It's always nice when a picture and some poetry evokes such wondrous wonderings, Hanorbi. Excellent job.

Mon, July 27th, 2015 10:57pm

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I'm glad it did, Jack! There's going to be a second poem to shed more light on your questions, telling the story of the last three.

Mon, July 27th, 2015 4:10pm

unmasked delusions

Awesome- your poems keep getting better and better and each one has a different fantasy vibe to it that allows the imagination to explore different possibilities. Your poems take me to all sorts of places. It's beyond cool. That pictures is awesome by the way!!! A new favorite. Where do you find these pictures? I want to be inspired too! :)

Mon, July 27th, 2015 11:21pm

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DeviantArt. It's where I get all my pictures :) There's so much there that you'll never run out of ideas if you take the time to wander. I'm glad to hear I'm improving with each poem; woo progress lol. Thanks unmasked!

Mon, July 27th, 2015 4:39pm

Whiskey Charlie

You really know how to fire up the imagination. I tend to be too rooted in reality to take things so far out. It is writers like you who stretch my brain to new limits. Good show, Hanorbi, and thank you for sharing.

Tue, July 28th, 2015 1:11am

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I'm glad I was able to spark some of the creativity in you, Whiskey! Thank you for the read and comment as always.

Mon, July 27th, 2015 6:31pm

unmasked delusions

Hey again, I did write a poem based of deviantart. But I'm not sure how to insert a picture into the poem like you do. It ends up being 'error' how do you do it?

Tue, July 28th, 2015 3:30am

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Oh, don't copy and paste it into the box. That'll never work. There's a little button at the top to insert a picture and then you can do it from there. It'll ask you for the url of the pic or the zip from your files, so make sure you have the picture copied before you paste the link into that box. Make sure you resize it so it fits in the box, too... I found resizing the width to 450 works the best and then the other resizes itself to fit the picture :) Let me know if it works for ya

Mon, July 27th, 2015 8:41pm

Jeff Bezaire

Awesome! Many bold words used that capture the gravitas of seeing the gods and witnessing the majesty of the world from on high. Loved the picture that went with this piece, probably one of my favourites. It was difficult not to glimpse at after reading each stanza. That picture in itself says a thousand words, and your poem says a thousand more (or at least fifty more) :) I really dig the mention of Atlas. In paintings and sketches, he's always my favourite deity to be depicted. The thought of being so huge, of being pressed against the ceiling of the earth (when people thought earth had a ceiling . . . and was flat), is a true definition of a god in my opinion, and you're depictions of the view from on high of the first three is a great compliment to that idea. (I like your new profile photo by the way)

Tue, July 28th, 2015 4:00am

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Yeah, Atlas is awesome. I'm glad everything seems good about this one. I felt like I needed a change with my profile pic, but I wanted it to be kinda similar to my last one. Thank you for reading and commenting, Jeff!

Mon, July 27th, 2015 9:09pm

unmasked delusions

Thanks figured it out :) (sorry for having to comment on your work)

Tue, July 28th, 2015 4:30am

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No worries :D I'm just glad it worked out for you.

Mon, July 27th, 2015 9:31pm

mikimarie

Hey never apologize for random, especially reading requests, I am always happy to read other people's work, which is the main reason I'm not writing much of my own. Too busy in other people's worlds. I loved it, so good call there and thanks for the request. Feel free to recommend other writers or pieces too, I'm always on the lookout for something new to read.

Tue, July 28th, 2015 5:26am

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Oh, cool! If you're interested in discovering new writers, there's a place on my profile for my personal favorites here on Booksie. I organized them by content, so you can take your pick on what you like and go from there. If you need something to read from me, the stuff in my featured list is always my recent best. Thanks so much for the read; I really appreciate it :)

Mon, July 27th, 2015 10:42pm

B Douglas Slack

Great poem, Hanorbi. Deviant Art certainly does have some great pictures, but you have to keep in mind that a lot of them are copyrighted and you must ask permission to use them. ~Tom

Tue, July 28th, 2015 3:41pm

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Thanks, Tom! Trust me, I know. I think what I might do in the future is post a link to the artists page, just to help them and to give credit where credit is due.

Tue, July 28th, 2015 9:07am

DLCannon

This is very spectacular. I love the view in the picture. Never seen such a sight! reminds me of a dream back in Jr. High, about me falling from an airplane wing. But I didn't understand why the 3 pillars were ":the worst." They're so beautiful.

Wed, July 29th, 2015 5:27am

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I wanted that bit to be up for interpretation as to why they're the worst. That question is somewhat answered in the second poem entitled 'The Last Three' if you'd like to read more. Thank you, Cannon!

Tue, July 28th, 2015 10:32pm

Mr Watson

Great poem, loved the idea of trying to find the answers to the questions we all want to know !

Fri, July 31st, 2015 9:05pm

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I do too! Late night thinking leads to some magical poetry sometimes. Thanks for the read!

Fri, July 31st, 2015 4:03pm

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