Seeing the truth

I've got some thing in my eye
A vision of you
that irritates me through and through
I scratch and rub.
But nothing removes the itch
The pain draws tears
as i reminise on every kiss
you laid upon my lips
The cumalitive years we shared and bared
You said you cared
You lying bitch
And you spent your love on a photograph
of a G-string Hunk
who made you laugh
And those tunnels in your eyes
grew so distant
and wide
As much as i tried
I could no longer distinguish
any light.

Submitted: May 25, 2007

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John Wanjora

I like the descriptiveness and the imagery you've put into this piece, especially your opening part. It really shows why the tears can't help dripping. Its a lovli poem - we all get ditched at one time or another in life.

Fri, May 25th, 2007 1:20pm


To me, getting Ditched is an occupational hazard .. I am about as stable as the planet!An gals tend to need stability..or at least someone to walk
thanks for the comment

Sat, May 26th, 2007 4:51am

JL Musgrave

Well done. I hope this did not happen to you but if it did just remember we are not all like that.

Fri, May 25th, 2007 3:24pm

Reply happened to me.
second puppy love as a teen. so it left a scar.I know women aren't all like that but its a Known fact that women are Nurturers and think interms of something being one thingand becoming it a seed to a tree or child to adult(*)A man has simple one set objectives,Involving a spear or other tools ..we don't as a man think ahead Rather attemp our aim ..if it fails we sit back drink a beer and watch t.v. to pass the time until the next target arrives ..Lol
(*)Or man into there idea of a man !which is where it all goes wrong !

Sat, May 26th, 2007 5:07am


Great description. Most women are nurturers, I on the other hand want to find the man I have no need to change. Confident yet with an ability to be sensitive, cave man with a dress sense, lol brilliant and able to be stupid at the same time. Does this man exist? Well done, Catch up with me now and then, writings are a bit emotional at the mo, lots going on. Moodle Xx

Fri, June 1st, 2007 1:22am


You are a rare breed Moodle .. maybe the shape of things to come in human Evolution ! thanks for the comment.

Fri, June 8th, 2007 7:07pm

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