Poisonous Existance

Poem by: HiddenLight

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I'm trying to convey a depression, along with other underlying emotions, from abuse.

Inky, poisonous snow

Pelts down, with anger.

With rage as uncontrollable as him.

An apathetic, poised actor.

It seeps and leaks,

Scars and pains.

Creates itself a grave.

To fix? She still refrains.

Her pain still remains.

This situation of misgiving,

To this life she retains,

This process of living.

This ink stain,

This buried head tumour,

She smothers on her

Smile, practised and bitter.

Becoming a nail, rusted with weakness.

Trying her best to take the beating.

Unable to take the pressure, bending whilst

Hammered into His desired position.

Mind, bent, twisted, contorted.

Her control over free will flickers,

Allowed to it previously from previous owners,

Previous care, previous negotiators.

Submitted: April 14, 2012

Poetry depression abuse family life father hate poison daughter teenager mental health

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dmarieviolet

wow, a lot of the poems lately are depressing. Anyway it was good :)

Sat, April 14th, 2012 10:07pm

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thanks... I think :L

Sat, April 14th, 2012 4:11pm

Ghonesis

This poem is difficult for me to read. So metaphorical, rich vocabulary, descriptive, it's like a puzzle.
This might be a good thing, I mean, it makes me reread it more than twice, but I prefer poetry that's easier to read and still conveys as much emotion.
And again, I miss the flow that makes poetry so easy to read. =(
But then again, I'm not a native speaker, that might trouble me. I still think you're a good writer. ;)

Sun, April 15th, 2012 6:13pm

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Thanks so much :) really appreciate it! I'll try and work on that again, I know my work is pretty broken up so I'll try and fix it :)

Mon, April 16th, 2012 6:20am