Away the Pain

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic


Pinpoints of white diamond light

Against a sky of velvet night


Tracing lines to pattern make

My mind away it can take


Away the pain --- sharp and sweet

Full of sorrows and passions heat


Away the scalding, salty tears

Away the paralyzing fears


Offer the simple ache of joy

And tender kisses, not a ploy


Bring me sweet serenity

Away the pain of being me.

Submitted: November 28, 2011

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I like it. Well written :)

Mon, November 28th, 2011 1:21pm


Thank you!

Mon, November 28th, 2011 5:22am

fresh spirits

A good start:)I read the rest too:)

Mon, November 28th, 2011 1:35pm


I'm still adding more as I pull them from my personal journal. I'm glad you like this one. It's the only one I've ever written that I actually like.

Mon, November 28th, 2011 5:39am

Lucy Lucy

This one is a good poem. Short simple and sweet. Your attempt to make it rhyming is remarkable. A good one - I would say.

Mon, November 28th, 2011 1:49pm


Thank you, Lucy. Not all poetry rhymes :) But this one is really the only one I've written that I love. I'm gonna look through your story that you recommended as soon as I have some time, but I'm at work at the moment.

Mon, November 28th, 2011 5:51am

Wednesday Grace

I like this a lot! You are so expressive! Your diction is fantastic making your poem that much more interesting. Keep up the good writing, you are a talented author!

Wed, November 30th, 2011 8:07pm


Thank you! I'm actually working on a book. It'll take me a while , but its something to work towards.

Wed, November 30th, 2011 12:10pm

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