no name1

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Horror  |  House: Booksie Classic

What would you do if your biggest fear was inside of you?
What could you do?...

I find myself bed stricken with only a half ideah of what's happened.Paralysis from the neck down I find insomnia to be my only friend.I don't consider the nightmare infested comas I slip in and out of sleep.It became a pattern.coma, anxiety, anger, pity, coma,....ect.
until one day I felt a tingle apon my lower lip.my feeling is coming back!I'm gonna make it!this feeling soon passed as the spider in my mouth crawled down my throat.....
.....coma


Submitted: February 27, 2012

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TheWhiteRavenMasquerade

This is again... Incredible... I love this a lot
---but---
hate to hate
but
i thought you somewhat... spoiled this masterpiece... with the ect.
*suggestion*
maybe a:
"coma, anxiety, anger, pity, coma, anxiety, anger, pity..."
and leave it like that...
and I REALLY enjoyed the end... the use of the "...coma" really concluded this and the use of the spider... just great... another GREAT one.. keep it up :D

Fri, March 9th, 2012 2:19am

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Thanks for the advise.

Thu, March 8th, 2012 6:23pm

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