want to die

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

i feeling really down when i wrote this

I want to die I dont know why ,all this sadness is leaking from my eyes, I want to do suicide, I want to cry out to whom I hate in my life, but I want to die now, I wish a way out, let me free just let me be , I am crying please help me my sadness has goten the best of me, dont let me die please, but I want so much to go away, I should have stayed in that place of safety that day, I want to die now to my death, the closest thing to me is my chest, I want to crawl in to a ball, leave this world in a call, I love the pain of my own blade, against my skin I let it stay, sliding down my arm this day, in a staight line in my vain, please blood so warm of dripping pangs of pain, leaving me everyday, I hate what I've become, but you wont let me be alone, your always whispering words to me, die die please your worth nothing to me, saying word of death, pleading me in depth, I want you to go away I hate hearing my own pain, saying your stupid and useless, no one will ever love this


Submitted: May 22, 2011

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Ruth Njenda

well, really heartbreaking, hope you not feeling this way. There is hope out there.

Sun, May 22nd, 2011 11:11am

arun

Let me free just let me be - outstanding words.

To whome i hate - whom; goten - gotten; deapth - depth; Try to avoid spelling mistakes. These silliest errors will make our creations look weird no matter how great it is.

I want to crawl into a ball, leave this world in a call - I liked these words.

Nicely written. Not only you felt low when writing, you made me to empathize for you and now, I too am out of spirits.
Use punctuations properly. Dont - don't, ive - i've.
No more thing - capitalize 'i' always. It's a rule (I think so).
All the best.
Keep writing.

Mon, May 23rd, 2011 6:36am

arun

Um last suggestion is one more thing not no more thing!
Sorry.

Mon, May 23rd, 2011 6:39am

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i got it :) thanks again for the input

Sun, May 22nd, 2011 11:43pm

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