Flotsam
I’ve given myself up
to the sea,
to where the waves
are taking me.
The tide will push,
the tide will pull,
the water streaming,
lungs so full.
This ocean seizes,
gets to chose
if I win or
if I lose.
Where the waves will take me,
we will have to wait and see.
Submitted: March 19, 2018
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That could easily be put to a nice Irish lullaby. Nicely worded
Mon, March 19th, 2018 6:33pm
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Thanks for reading, DH!
Mon, March 19th, 2018 1:39pm
I would throw you a life-belt if I could, Hully. Stay buoyant!
Mon, March 19th, 2018 7:48pm
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Thanks, Sue. I think of this one as a bit of a failure -- it didn't really say what I meant it to.
Mon, March 19th, 2018 1:38pm
A good write, Hully. It has a mythological feel to it, like Odysseus or Jason of the Argonauts lost to the ocean's whim.
Mon, March 19th, 2018 8:16pm
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I guess. I have to admit this did not turn out like I intended, but I posted it anyway. Thanks for reading.
Mon, March 19th, 2018 1:35pm
I like the use of the sea, nice poem Hull...Tom...
Mon, March 19th, 2018 11:22pm
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Thanks for reading, Tom!
Tue, March 20th, 2018 12:53pm
Ohh wow Hully! Woww wow woww phenomenal rhymes and the message is just wow
Tue, March 20th, 2018 4:27am
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Thanks, Rehmat. Glad you enjoyed the read.
Tue, March 20th, 2018 12:55pm
Wow! Such a deep poem. So much said in these concise lines. Very well done, Hully.
Tue, March 20th, 2018 2:14pm
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Thanks, jaylisbeth. I was kind of disappointed in this one, it didn't really say what I intended.
Tue, March 20th, 2018 12:58pm
I loved everything about this poem, Ms. Hullabaloo. Nicely done.
Tue, March 20th, 2018 2:45pm
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Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment, Adam.
Tue, March 20th, 2018 1:00pmFacebook Comments
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Mike S.
Might I suggest a flotation device? Excellent, Hull!
Mon, March 19th, 2018 6:04pmAuthor
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That would kind of ruin the idea though....can't be flotsam with a flotation device.
Mon, March 19th, 2018 11:12amThanks for reading, Mike!