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Visiting Friends

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Flash Fiction  |  House: The Imaginarium


A short story written for the Imaginarium House latest sentence challenge.

Submitted: January 17, 2018

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Visiting Friends

Mom!” Jack dashed into the room, his excitement clearly visible. “They’re coming on a visit!”

Who are, dear?” his mother asked.

My friends. They’ll be here in five minutes!”

Ah.” Even though she seemed to doubt her son’s words, she still began to tidy, then gave up. The room was in too much of a mess after her last few night-shifts, and anyway, she was used to Jack’s stories.

Jack had his eyes glued to the back windows, although why them instead of the front ones she did not know. For a moment she pondered asking him, then shrugged the urge away. Better not to encourage his increasingly over-active imagination.

Look! They’re here!”

The glow of lights shone through the back window. He must have told them to drive round the house and she must have missed the lights as they had approached. Suddenly realizing that visitors really had arrived, she frantically tried to do some instant tidying, managing to do nothing more than make more mess.

You’d better go and let them in, Jack.”

No need, you know, Mom. They’ve been here loads and always let themselves in.”

hat did not sound right, but before she had a chance to comment, the door slowly opened. The door had been locked. She knew that; hadn’t she just turned the key just half an hour ago?

They walked in, three of them, and Jack leaped at them with delight while his Mom sank down on to a seat, open-mouthed, tongue-tied.

Hi, guys! This is my Mom. I’ve told you about her before.” Jack turned from his visitors to look at his Mom. Why wasn’t she being a bit more welcoming? “Would you like a drink? I could get you juice.”

The visitors didn’t seem to say a word, yet Jack chatted away to his three guests as though they were engaged in a real conversation. His mother just sat rigidly still, as if she was in total shock.

Mom, aren’t you going to say ‘Goodbye’? They have to go now.”

Good....bye,” she managed to whisper as they walked through the door without even opening it, the last one to leave making a loud clicking sound.

Once more, the back of the house was bathed in bright light before it became dark again..

So, Mom, what did you think of them? They’re my very best friends so I’m glad you got to meet them.”

Jack’s mother shook her head and got shakily to her feet. “When did you know they were coming, Jack? Goodness knows what they think of life on Earth. Please do me a favor if they are going to visit again.” As though in a daze, she plumped up a cushion, put it back in its place on the chair. “Warn me next time!”


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