Dooms day

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i hope you all like this poem i wrote it in school.

It's time for a change i don't mean to be a pain those who have perished witch we forgotten all along the times that had begon remember there is always dooms day hope you shall remember this now or your fate will be the same for who are dead witch will punish you for all you have done wrong and for all you will ever do hear this warning those who are gone away remember your not alone if you hear a scream hide your head and go hide underneth your bed and wait till you hear the sound of a phone ringing remember this warning don't go underneth the phone while it's ringing or you will be doomed for all interding

Submitted: December 27, 2011

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Jitterbuglove

i luv it i think this is awsome :)

Tue, December 27th, 2011 3:29am

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thanks it took forever for me to figure out why it won't let anyone read it yet but i fixed the errors so everyone can read thanks for commenting.

Mon, December 26th, 2011 7:37pm

i am trying to live life to its fulliest

i love it Chad i am glad it's letting us see it :)

Tue, December 27th, 2011 3:33am

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thanks bro i am just glad it worked and so far everyone loves it.

Mon, December 26th, 2011 7:38pm

LizLew

It's pretty good. It was exactly how I expected it to be.
Liked.

Tue, December 27th, 2011 3:33am

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*smiles* thanks i always write poems alot too but the first time i put one of my poems on a site.

Mon, December 26th, 2011 7:39pm

luvbug1

i loved it u should wright more

Tue, December 27th, 2011 4:01am

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thanks i will i have lot's more poems and i also love your poems to.

Mon, December 26th, 2011 8:02pm

Lizzy99

Awsome...It has a great meaning behind it.

Tue, December 27th, 2011 5:00pm

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thanks i was in school when it came to me.

Tue, December 27th, 2011 3:26pm

XxlulucrossxX

;) Lol, I just remembered that I had promised to read your poem! >_< Sorry! And now, here I am! Here to fulfill my promise! XDDD Anyways, this poem is GREAT! Well-written! ^^ Continue to keep meh updated!

Wed, December 28th, 2011 12:37am

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lol it's ok and thanks i will keep you updated on it thanks for reading and commenting on it this really means alot.

Tue, December 27th, 2011 6:19pm

ghoul24

It's pretty nice. You kind of need to break the lines, but there's nothing bad with this poem at all. Nice job.

Wed, December 28th, 2011 5:29am

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thanks :) blame my teachers if you don't like it there fault they where preasuring me badly lol.

Tue, December 27th, 2011 9:33pm

I Am Emo And I Love It

It was a pretty cool poem and a nice one to read i liked it and i thought it was going to be shit with the title because its hard to live up to but it ain't.

Wed, December 28th, 2011 6:01pm

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thanks i am about to make a new poem i wrote in school.

Wed, December 28th, 2011 11:58am

Rosiejb

this is really awesome love it feel every words great job. really well written :D

Thu, December 29th, 2011 2:17pm

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thanks still writing my poems on paper before i post.

Thu, December 29th, 2011 5:12pm

Hadass

Deep shiit!!!! Awesome though!

Thu, December 29th, 2011 2:22pm

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um? thanks.....

Thu, December 29th, 2011 5:13pm

Lunaa

I normally don't like poetry, but to be honest you have a gift. Good job.
~Lunaa

Tue, January 3rd, 2012 10:52pm

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thanks :)

Wed, January 4th, 2012 6:49pm

individualstar

I think it would help if it was broken up into lines or at least with full stops, but otherwise I think it's really good, and I like it a lot :) keep it up :D

Sun, January 8th, 2012 3:40pm

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-_- why should i break it up into lines? my teachers never ever told me to do that.....

Tue, January 10th, 2012 7:07pm