The Gaining

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

I was sitting thinking and bam it just came out

My arms like wings catch the wind and sunlight within

To allow me the greatest gift of all mankind

To glide like an eagle upon the warm east wind

 

My legs like springs, unfurl to project me high

To allow me the ability to travel effortlessly

To bounce so high I can touch the edge of the sky

 

My body like armour, protects me against harm

To allow me the prospect of living a long life

To live and love and hold you within my arms

 

My mind like open doors to take in life’s span

To allow me to create, learn and be the best I can

To strive and teach the next generation of man

 

My soul like a well of acquiescent swirling half light

To allow me the peace I search for each day

To complete my being in the vision of gods sight


Submitted: April 11, 2012

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Riley Raine

Wow

Wed, April 11th, 2012 1:32am

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Thanks

Tue, April 10th, 2012 7:09pm

Insane Membrane

:-) very nice and dramatic

Wed, April 11th, 2012 2:29am

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Thanks man

Tue, April 10th, 2012 7:33pm

Aphrodite88

im not religious but this was still a beautiful poem very well written :)

Wed, April 11th, 2012 3:26am

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The strange this is neither am I It just ran out of my mind like water from a tap I was thinking how cool it would be to stand wings open to the sun.

Tue, April 10th, 2012 8:50pm

Megstar1563

Wow this was epic, I loved the flow and the words and of course the poem. Your awesome at this, keep it up :)

Wed, April 11th, 2012 5:21am

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I know, sorry thanks for that its just good fun!

Tue, April 10th, 2012 10:48pm

Audrey Wilson

very nice and good detail, keep up the good work! :P

Wed, April 11th, 2012 11:54am

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Thanks babe I shall!

Wed, April 11th, 2012 3:18pm

BITSxOFxKINKY

flying high here excellently scribed poetry very nice indeed

Wed, April 11th, 2012 2:18pm

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ta Tracey I appreciate it from a felloe scribe

Wed, April 11th, 2012 3:16pm

Blackdragon99

Wow man. This is different to your usual stuff. The writing i lighter and the beat is different too, or that's how I read it. Keep it up G :D
And I see you've met Meg ;)

Wed, April 11th, 2012 4:49pm

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yes and shes as cool as you. and yes I know its a light one for me but it works

Wed, April 11th, 2012 3:15pm

glitter snow426

oh wow, such an awesome powerful one indeed!! love this warm, precious breeze, so RADIANT, HEARTFELT and COMFORTING!!!

Wed, April 11th, 2012 4:55pm

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Thanks Vincey your comments always make me feel warmer inside

Wed, April 11th, 2012 3:04pm

Rosixis

That was amazing! Very vivid but still simple and beautifully written. Well done.

Wed, April 11th, 2012 7:04pm

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Thanks babe I had a thought and then bam out it popped

Wed, April 11th, 2012 3:13pm

KiaraCantBeKool

I'm not used to something so uplifting and happy from you, no offense lol but I love it all the same! You're a great writer

Wed, April 11th, 2012 7:16pm

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Thanks and I understand what you mean its surprised me

Wed, April 11th, 2012 3:10pm

XxlulucrossxX

WOW! :OOOO VERY descriptive! XDDD Very well done mate! Keep KMU-ing dude!

Wed, April 11th, 2012 7:51pm

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Thanks Dude!

Wed, April 11th, 2012 3:10pm

Alisindra

I definitely do like this. Awesome as always Ian. ^_^

Wed, April 11th, 2012 8:17pm

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Thanks Sin I hope your doing well and Hubby is good. I thought i would try the light instead of teh dark

Wed, April 11th, 2012 3:09pm

Jethro

You told me it was a lighter side of you, but I feel power behind it more than light. Well done, friendo(:

Wed, April 11th, 2012 10:54pm

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Why thank you Jethro, and if you read any of my other work you will see what I mean, this is a departure for me from the darkness that lives within, oh and welcom to the crazy train.

Wed, April 11th, 2012 4:25pm

Sistine

This is beautiful, very simple -as in not over flowerly language- and I think that just makes it all the more powerful. Wonderful work :)

Thu, April 12th, 2012 1:53am

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Thanks sis I appreciate that I just did a new poem for a comp it was great fun

Wed, April 11th, 2012 7:01pm

SmileValentine

wow.. this is epic! :)
just a WOW..

Thu, April 12th, 2012 12:05pm

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Thanks I tried to be the best and I think it worked

Thu, April 12th, 2012 7:33am

JM Starling

I have peeked at your other work, and this is not as dark. Your were a sunrise of beauty in this poem Wow!

Sun, April 29th, 2012 2:14pm

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Thank you I am a tad dark and malevolent I know

Sun, April 29th, 2012 5:17pm

JiDonnelly

New flew, its beautiful and I love it.
I really like the metaphors you use in this one.
As per your ending is amazing, you're holding all the aces Ian.

-Ji'

Sun, May 6th, 2012 5:31pm

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Thanks babe I missed you you busy at study or something? Anyway I hope to read more of your work soon.

Sun, May 6th, 2012 3:09pm

JiDonnelly

Flow**

-Ji'

Sun, May 6th, 2012 5:31pm

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OK

Sun, May 6th, 2012 3:07pm

Murnit

Aa Hah!! I knew it! (that I was right that is..) You are to me the Yin Yang of Booksie. There is light living in your darkness, cool water for your fire and so much more...lol let me not post poetry about you on your own page ;)

Great work G !! M x

Mon, May 21st, 2012 4:40am

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Damn you found it but alas I wrotye this for a competition so does that realy count?

G

Sun, May 20th, 2012 11:58pm

Murnit

"hmmmm": she ponders...

Tue, May 22nd, 2012 4:26am

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Ponder well babe

Tue, May 22nd, 2012 3:50pm

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