Sombody*

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

i just wrote this....
please comment on what you think thank YOU!!!!!!!!

i could use somebody
to always forever trust
i need somebody
to be there when its a must
i could use somebody
to wash away my tears
i need somebody
to scare away my tears
i could use somebody
to fix everthing that is wrong
i need somebody
to give me support because i'm not strong
i could use somebody
to find me help who i really am
i need somebody
that will always give a damn
i could use somebody
to tell me my dreams aren't that far
i need somebody
to help me believe in that wishing star
i could use somebody
to hold me tight
i need somebody
to tell me everything will be alright
Please somebody
never let me down
i could use somebody
to help me fing that heart that's never been found
i need somebody
to help me up from the ground
until then i will hold it in
forever it may seem
for all i have left to do is try to believe and dream
until i find that somebody
im a nobody


Submitted: May 30, 2010

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IheartTaylorLautner

sorry i misspelled SOMEBODY on the title! sooo asamed lol
please COMMENT and leave anything u would like me to read!

Sun, May 30th, 2010 2:37pm

Truth Sayer

You misspelled many things by the way :)
I feel that it was more like a song than a poem...I don't know.

Tue, June 29th, 2010 1:45pm

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oh yeah i know i spelled a lot of things wrong sorry:( haha thanks for reading..

Wed, June 30th, 2010 2:13am

Editor

'i could use somebody
to wash away my tears
i need somebody
to scare away my tears' 'to help me fing that heart that's never been found'

Okay, so spelling and grammar aside, I think it was alright. I read your profile and I am aware that you're more of a reader than a writer, and I think it's good that you're branching out and trying your hand at poety. In truth it hasn't got alot of depth, but it has a simple rhyme and there's obviously some emotion in it.

So, overall, I thought it was nice. (: Well done. Zoe. x

Tue, June 29th, 2010 3:40pm

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ummm thanks

Wed, June 30th, 2010 2:14am

Sammieee Jo

Sorry I havn't been on Booksie in a while, but I am catching up on all my reading and you were the first one!
I really love this poem, its a really amazing poem and I could really feel the need for someone in this poem. Great job! I think I am going to make this my number 1 favorite poem!
~Sammie

Tue, June 29th, 2010 7:57pm

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whoa thanks hahah it wasnt that good haha but that means a LOT thanks:) any reading u would like me to read plz tell me:)

Wed, June 30th, 2010 2:15am

LlittleGylfie13

this is good lol you DID make a few mistakes but disregarding them it was good. and i hope you know im always there for you to help ok? lol just call(: love you
savannah

Wed, June 30th, 2010 10:26am

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yeah i know haha thanks savannah im always here for u as well haha i wrote this a long ass time ago so watever:) LOVE YOU!

Fri, July 2nd, 2010 1:32am

Indy Jule

I like it alot! I don't really care so much about the mistakes, Its cOOl!! lol keep writing! ;)

Tue, August 3rd, 2010 12:47pm

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Omg thanks sooo much!!! Yeah this had somuch mistakes!! lmao! i wrote it a really long time ago too!!! but thanks soo much :D

Sat, September 4th, 2010 3:37am

Lady Elizabeth

Very lovely poem! I hope to see more work soon!

If you like Taylor Lautner btw, feel free to head over and check out my story "One Can Dream". It's all about a fan who gets to meet the Twilight cast, but strange things start happening!

Tue, September 28th, 2010 3:57pm

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