Short Story by: IMAD UL ISLAM
Genre: Children Stories
Submitted: May 23, 2012
© Copyright 2016 IMAD UL ISLAM. All rights reserved.
why is it called rebirth it has nothing to do with rebirth
It has by the way!! REBIRTH OF A NEW 'KHURRAM', A BRAVE ONE. YOU GOT IT. take care ^_^
Not bad at all. Nice little story that could get a little longer, though. Is it the father who is sitting on a bench? What is it that make him or someone else throw that rock into the boy's room? Tell us more about Khurram being afraid and what makes him want to prove himself brave enough to go fight one improbable foe in some park in the middle of the night. The rebirth theme is a good one. It needs a bit of work and this tale could become a better piece. And I think you can do it.
Thanks a lot for you precious comment. I really liked your suggestion and will (inshallah) try to add up those things to the story. Someone had already told me to do that a long time ago, to be precise when I completed writing it. But there is something about my heat that it tells me not do any changes once I have created a piece. It (heart) says that the first time you write comes from the heart, but when you make changes the mind comes in to help. But what you said doesn't need any change. I have to add up those things in the story. So, I will try my best and tell my heart that I am not going to change it but to add new things into it. Thanks again for your feedback. IMAD.
I really really enjoyed this short story, for some reason raised goosebumps on my arms! Loved it.
Thanks for giving it a read and for leaving your kind words:)
Nice one. We all would think it to be sci fi story but it was great the way it turned out in the end.
I am glad you liked it. I am absolutely thankful to you for reading and commenting this story. By the way it was published in a magzine 'SPRINGER' and I received Rs. 500 as cash prize for the first position! Yes, it received the first prize. Regards.
I like it alot, it gave me goosebumps! It was spooky! :D
I am absolutely thankfull to you for reading this piece and leaving your comment. Thanks a lot. Have a great day:)
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