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A very short story about BR restince fighters and the civlian Alice.

The AK-47 was heavy in Simons hands. Simon let out a long sighed. He was nervous. He was nervous because out window to his left was his target. Simons target was....difficult, well armored and had 6 monkeys with it. Just think Simon...Just think they are monkeys not people, and rember what you are fighting for. Rember.

Rember thought Alice. Bright lights flashed before her. She was moving, moving through sterile halls. Wait, a hospital, a hospital, why a hosp... I rember! It was a explosion and their was fighting, bullets, a car. The car exploded. it made sense now! But how could i be in such a clean hospital, their wasn't any near the explosion.

Simon swallod hard. He was to make the first shots. He was the one to start it off, he was the key player. Closing his eyes for a breif moment.

"come on" Said Ed under is breadth. He could see simons window from where he was he had perfect shot, and it was now or never.

Simon gritted his teeth and got into postion and started it.

Ed peered round the window just to see a hail of Simons bullets smash into soilders bellow. And now it was Ed's turn to do his bit.

Simon watched Ed run out from a nearby building holding a large opject, which he gaussed would be the bomb.

Alice fully rembered now. It had been some soilders and a tank coming up the street and some BR guys attacked them and planted a bomb on the tank, it wasn't a car it was the tank. I hope i'm not injured. Alice stretched out her face and found it sore round her mouth so she reached up and found out what it was. A long deep scar ran from her chin to just under her eye.

Submitted: September 20, 2009

War and Military milatery

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freakygothgirl666

very well writen. i like how you did this, very creative. keep it up.

Tue, October 13th, 2009 11:04pm

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Thank you.

Wed, October 14th, 2009 3:00am

Mistress of Word Play

The images are so vivid in this write. Wonderful descriptions. You possess a very amazing talent.
Really enjoyed reading this.
Susan

Wed, October 14th, 2009 11:54pm

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Thank you once again Susan.

Sat, October 17th, 2009 3:26am

translingual writer 79

Thanks for sharing this story with us. As Susan said, the images were vivid. I could imagine every action as I read. There were some spelling mistakes, but putting that aside, the narrative was enjoyable.
Can you drop by my site and review my first story? I'd really appreciate it.

Fri, October 23rd, 2009 12:29pm

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thanks, and sure.

Fri, October 23rd, 2009 5:32am

Graeme Montrose

Wow! Very vivid indeed, you describe the scene well, it all jumps out at you. Indeed you are a talented writer. spelling and grammar and punctuation are all things that can be worked on, the greatest asset is not these, but Rather the talent, the vision, the inspiration the inner eye! This you have and need to expand, the more you write the better it will be, you will indeed hone your talent. All the best!

Tue, November 24th, 2009 1:35pm

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Thank you alot Graeme

Tue, November 24th, 2009 5:37am