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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

don't ask. please please please don't ask, because i don't understand it myself.

it's really quite terrible, but...don't let my neverending self-esteem issues sway your opinion.

you be the judge.

The awakening sun
Brought a whisper
From somewhere
Buried deep.
Tick, it said.
Then, tock, it said.
Tick and tock and tick and tock.
Ceaseless seconds–
The tick of timers
Brings evidence of an end.
Mortality runs deep within,
A taste so bitter
It makes us choke.
Each ding we hear
Reminds us of our own
To some, the tick
Is not of timer
But of a clock.
The ticking and tocking
Are not means to an end,
But hints to a beginning,
The sweet joy of
Of Invincibility.
But he who knows
That timers run out
Is wise
If he also believes
That the heart of
Is time.
And time is

Submitted: October 28, 2009

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'looks at screen in absolute wonder'
i loveee this poem, its so beatiful, and true, and amazing and BRILLIANT, and genius, and perfect, and gosh every positive thing in the world....

Wed, October 28th, 2009 8:26pm


ok...thanks! =D

Wed, October 28th, 2009 1:33pm

to lie on the floor without holding on

How can you look at this and call it terrible? Never-ending self-esteem issues obviously get in the way of you seeing what an incredible writer you are. This, this is true poetry.

Fri, October 30th, 2009 4:51am


you have no idea. my never-ending self-esteem issues kill me at least three times daily. but, yeah, sometimes, i can't help but look at it and call it terrible. there are times, though, when i read it and think it's one of the best poems i've ever written. it depends on my mood, really. but thanks! i'm really really glad you like it! =)

Fri, October 30th, 2009 12:13pm


Wow. That was a really amazing poem. Im at a loss for words. It was not at all terrible. It was really great. I don't know how to describe it(in a good way). This is one of your best poems. You really know how to make an impact on the reader. Wow. Thats all I have to say. Just Wow.

Tue, November 3rd, 2009 6:34pm


wow. thanks!

Tue, November 3rd, 2009 11:37am


I really like this one and the picture fits perfectly you write amazing !
& i know how you feel when you think your work isnt good and then you show someone else and it's abouloutly amazing to them .

Fri, December 11th, 2009 2:04am


yeah...happens to me with almost every single thing i write. thanks so much for reading! glad you liked it! =)

Fri, December 11th, 2009 2:11pm

swedish fish

Wow, that was great. It reminded me of your other poem, 'painting the seconds'. Pretty deep.

Sat, January 2nd, 2010 7:59pm


hmmm...i guess i could see how it would be reminiscent of 'painting the seconds.' i'm glad you liked it! thanks! =D

Sat, January 2nd, 2010 12:07pm


"And time is

This bit reminds me of our own futility and mortality. I like the idea behind the poem.

Tue, April 20th, 2010 5:23pm


but you don't like the poem itself? oh, well. thanks for reading! i'm glad you liked the idea behind it. i guess that's all that really matters. thanks! =)

Wed, April 28th, 2010 10:13am

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