Despondent
Poem by: iola ried
Despondent.
_
What do you do?
Your failure's is all you see
The night sinks in to your fragile bones
You've died before you've even breathed
_
Blood runs dry deep inside
There's nothing left to keep you alive
Yet a smile is fastened to your face
Truths are hidden, you live by lies
_
Pain amplifies harsher and stronger
Love becomes feeble and weak
Demons haunt your lonely nights
Your guardian angel can no longer fight
_
The fire of love dies in ache
Leaving in its wake ashes of hate
Embers of pain freeze your core
And do nothing to melt the ice in your soul
_
With labored breath's you breathe on
In dying hope of a dawn to come
Lying in a dark hollow, six feet deep
Hoping this breath is your last to keep
_
What do you do?
Rise up, leave your failures behind
Let the past go; your heart will beat again inside
Seek the light, its never too far away
_
Even the darkest nights have stars that shine
Caterpillars eventually turn to butterflies
One candle is all you need
It'll get you through to daylight
_
A smile will brighten those empty eyes
You'll learn to love this brief life
For you have found one reason to live
Against those many more to die tonight
© Copyright 2016 iola ried. All rights reserved.
Comments
Truly amazing poem :D keep up the good work
Author
Reply
Thankyou =)
I love the volta in this poem! It's such an amazing turn. From hopeless to seeking hope, isn't that what each human faces at one point or another? I love it! Keep writing:)
Author
Reply
Thanks! And I'm glad it worked =D
Nicely written. Good choice of words and great feeling is portrayed through your poem. You have a talent for poetry, I hope to see more from you!
Author
Reply
Thanks alot =)
very good it flows very well..you have good rhythm :D
Author
Reply
Thanks! =)
Really interesting - floating between hope and despair, flitting from one to the other, never quite settling on either. At least that's how my prozac-free brain receives it. Bravo.
Author
Reply
Spot on! And thanks =)
An interesting dramatic flip of the switch between feeling dead and feeling alive again. Good use of imagery, this is the kind of poetry I like.
Author
Reply
Thanks alot!
so amazing, you are so talented. awesome poem :) I love it!!!!!!!! it was so deep and sad ... but still it's one of my favorites :)
Author
Reply
Thank you, this means alot =D
That one was great. Sad but true. Great job.
Author
Reply
Thank you so much =D
I love this
Author
Reply
ThankYou =)
sad, crushing, deep... but nonetheless very hopeful! thanks for sharing this wonderful piece, i enjoyed it. brought back some old memories but what the hey, we all live in the present! the last two lines are EPIC.
like voted!
Author
Reply
Your most welcome and thanks so much for the read and vote! =D
Its amazing!!!!
Author
Reply
ThankYou! =D
This is very dynamic, it's brilliant how you centered the poem around despair and frustration. The emotion behind it leaves me speechless, this is very interesting and it is very well written, This is my favorite out of your poems because it's not really centered around love, but the others are good as well, Well done =)
Author
Reply
Haha, thank you very much for reading and commenting =D
Haunting and alive althoug its darker subjects I love this.
Author
Reply
Thanks! =)
I certainly enjoy the imagery that this piece creates in the readers mind. The stark contrasts in contains are very thought provoking.
Author
Reply
Thanks! =)
Absolutely AWESOME! Finally someone that has encompassed my motto, you have to experience the bad to be able to see the good! Extremely well written and a joy! Brilliantly done!
Author
Reply
Wow... Thank you so very much! Positive feedback keeps me writing :)
Beautiful ...
Author
Reply
Thanks :)
OH MY GOD. THIS IS YOUR MASTER PIECE. THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST POEMS, I'VE EVER READ SO FAR! I'm simply lost for words on just Beautiful this is. Exquisite work!
Author
Reply
Wow... I don't know what to say, thank you ever so much! :)
Wow...this was amazing. Your words dance across the page, an artist's paintbrush coloring the canvas of my mind. Beautiful and deep. The heart sighs, content, as the tide swirls about her in her silent reprieve.
Author
Reply
Wow... You're quite a poet yourself ;)
Thanks bunches for the read and comment :D
Fantastic! Great twist, very real emotions.
Author
Reply
Thanks for the read and comment =)
Other Content by iola ried
Booksie Popular Content
-
Shelves: 67
-
Shelves: 7
-
Shelves: 10
-
Shelves: 7
-
Shelves: 32
-
Shelves: 7
Genres & Types
Paste the link to picture in the entry below:
Paste the link to Youtube video in the following entry:
Cannot annotate a non-flat selection. Make sure your selection starts and ends within the same node.
An annotation cannot contain another annotation.
There was an error uploading your file.
Imagine Words