Despondent.
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What do you do?
Your failure's is all you see
The night sinks in to your fragile bones
You've died before you've even breathed
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Blood runs dry deep inside
There's nothing left to keep you alive
Yet a smile is fastened to your face
Truths are hidden, you live by lies
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Pain amplifies harsher and stronger
Love becomes feeble and weak
Demons haunt your lonely nights
Your guardian angel can no longer fight
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The fire of love dies in ache
Leaving in its wake ashes of hate
Embers of pain freeze your core
And do nothing to melt the ice in your soul
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With labored breath's you breathe on
In dying hope of a dawn to come
Lying in a dark hollow, six feet deep
Hoping this breath is your last to keep
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What do you do?
Rise up, leave your failures behind
Let the past go; your heart will beat again inside
Seek the light, its never too far away
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Even the darkest nights have stars that shine
Caterpillars eventually turn to butterflies
One candle is all you need
It'll get you through to daylight
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A smile will brighten those empty eyes
You'll learn to love this brief life
For you have found one reason to live
Against those many more to die tonight
Submitted: March 14, 2012
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Comments
I love the volta in this poem! It's such an amazing turn. From hopeless to seeking hope, isn't that what each human faces at one point or another? I love it! Keep writing:)
Wed, March 14th, 2012 11:58pm
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Thanks! And I'm glad it worked =D
Thu, March 15th, 2012 7:44am
very good it flows very well..you have good rhythm :D
Fri, March 16th, 2012 1:42pm
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Thanks! =)
Fri, March 16th, 2012 12:22pm
Really interesting - floating between hope and despair, flitting from one to the other, never quite settling on either. At least that's how my prozac-free brain receives it. Bravo.
Fri, March 30th, 2012 10:30pm
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Spot on! And thanks =)
Fri, March 30th, 2012 3:31pm
An interesting dramatic flip of the switch between feeling dead and feeling alive again. Good use of imagery, this is the kind of poetry I like.
Sun, May 13th, 2012 5:30pm
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Thanks alot!
Sun, May 20th, 2012 5:29am
so amazing, you are so talented. awesome poem :) I love it!!!!!!!! it was so deep and sad ... but still it's one of my favorites :)
Tue, May 29th, 2012 12:33pm
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Thank you, this means alot =D
Sat, June 2nd, 2012 5:10am
That one was great. Sad but true. Great job.
Sun, July 29th, 2012 11:37pm
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Thank you so much =D
Wed, August 1st, 2012 2:43pm
I love this
Sun, August 12th, 2012 11:35am
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ThankYou =)
Sun, August 12th, 2012 2:16pm
sad, crushing, deep... but nonetheless very hopeful! thanks for sharing this wonderful piece, i enjoyed it. brought back some old memories but what the hey, we all live in the present! the last two lines are EPIC.
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Your most welcome and thanks so much for the read and vote! =D
Thu, August 23rd, 2012 2:13pm
Its amazing!!!!
Sun, August 26th, 2012 7:35pm
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ThankYou! =D
Mon, August 27th, 2012 10:38am
This is very dynamic, it's brilliant how you centered the poem around despair and frustration. The emotion behind it leaves me speechless, this is very interesting and it is very well written, This is my favorite out of your poems because it's not really centered around love, but the others are good as well, Well done =)
Tue, September 4th, 2012 9:41pm
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Haha, thank you very much for reading and commenting =D
Wed, September 5th, 2012 5:46am
Haunting and alive althoug its darker subjects I love this.
Thu, September 6th, 2012 11:07pm
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Thanks! =)
Fri, September 7th, 2012 5:05am
Absolutely AWESOME! Finally someone that has encompassed my motto, you have to experience the bad to be able to see the good! Extremely well written and a joy! Brilliantly done!
Tue, October 9th, 2012 4:51pm
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Wow... Thank you so very much! Positive feedback keeps me writing :)
Tue, October 9th, 2012 9:58am
Beautiful ...
Thu, October 11th, 2012 6:51am
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Thanks :)
Thu, October 11th, 2012 7:27am
OH MY GOD. THIS IS YOUR MASTER PIECE. THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST POEMS, I'VE EVER READ SO FAR! I'm simply lost for words on just Beautiful this is. Exquisite work!
Sat, October 13th, 2012 2:53pm
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Wow... I don't know what to say, thank you ever so much! :)
Sat, October 13th, 2012 4:00pm
Wow...this was amazing. Your words dance across the page, an artist's paintbrush coloring the canvas of my mind. Beautiful and deep. The heart sighs, content, as the tide swirls about her in her silent reprieve.
Tue, October 16th, 2012 2:32pm
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Wow... You're quite a poet yourself ;)
Thanks bunches for the read and comment :D
Fantastic! Great twist, very real emotions.
Sun, May 26th, 2013 8:40pm
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Thanks for the read and comment =)
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Truly amazing poem :D keep up the good work
Wed, March 14th, 2012 11:50pmAuthor
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Thankyou =)
Thu, March 15th, 2012 7:45am