Dying In Your Arms Tonight

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

So don’t let go of me now
Cause I’m dying in your arms tonight
Something so right can’t go wrong
So we really don’t think again
Your love has left me feeling like
I wanna die in your arms tonight

Dying In Your Arms Tonight.

We won't be missed

Once we're gone

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So lets do it today

By tonight we'll fade

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I'm feeling so blue

Nobody cares what I come to

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Take this step with me

Baby, I know it'll set us free

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Loving you shouldn't hurt so bad

It's slowly driven me mad

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So tonight at the barn it'll be

Only when we're gone will they finally see

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That our love was true

I was meant only for you

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In hay blocks we lay

I get the feeling it'll be okay

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As I take away your pain

And you take away mine again

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You slide the knife across my wrist

Lean over and steal my breath with a kiss

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Then cut your lifeline with the blade

Take me in your arms, together we fade

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Your heartbeat fills my ear

We rest in peace, our end is near

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Hand in hand we knock at deaths door

With wings we fly off the floor

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Life's back on track, all went with plan

I couldn't have died in the arms of a better man


Submitted: April 03, 2012

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Charles Mausolf

Nicely written. This has a rather mix of emotions, Kinda sad, but full of love.

Wed, April 4th, 2012 7:58pm

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Thanks! And I'm glad you think so, it was what was intended =]

Wed, April 4th, 2012 2:14pm

optimysticynic

This is tragic, star-crossed lovers; always a great plot line. It reads a bit like a song. I love reading the work of young writers, there's a lot of potential here.

Sat, April 14th, 2012 11:06pm

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Thanks so much =)

Sat, May 5th, 2012 8:16am

Insane Membrane

ooh you know if you die in hay the hay keeps your body warm and your finders are in hopes that you are still alive .. still I guess your lovers would have blood everywhere giving a slight clue all is not well
I liked it very much

Sat, April 21st, 2012 10:25pm

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I didn't know that! And thanks =D

Sat, May 5th, 2012 8:06am

individualstar

this is amazing, very well written :)

Mon, April 23rd, 2012 7:52pm

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Thanks=)

Sat, May 5th, 2012 8:05am

Russ Hammond

Ah, nothing better than a dark love in a beautifully crafted poem.

Mon, May 7th, 2012 6:21am

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Thanks!=)

Sun, May 13th, 2012 9:52am

CreepyCHILDnita

i like it, the flow was like a heart beat nice and steady. very good.

Mon, May 21st, 2012 12:22am

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Thanks alot!

Fri, May 25th, 2012 5:41am

soccergirl

wow... I love it.. so much emotion and love... a great write. you have talent :)

Tue, May 29th, 2012 12:30pm

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Thnak you ever so much! =)

Sat, June 2nd, 2012 4:54am

angel plant

I love it as well. It is pure love so simple. Well written.

Sat, July 28th, 2012 1:19am

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Thanks alot!

Sun, July 29th, 2012 2:27pm

siirdarkmaz

if i was a girl i would've cried. but i'm not a girl. haha jk great job. I loved it. heaps of emotions in simple lines. great job

Mon, July 30th, 2012 11:03am

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Hahaha, man tears then? =P
Thanxslots! =D

Wed, August 1st, 2012 2:36pm

jenny2801

amazing, what love can do:) beautiful poem

Wed, August 8th, 2012 1:08am

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Its an intoxicant, and thanks =)

Wed, August 8th, 2012 2:14pm

Blackdragon99

Simple yet stunning!
I love the romance of this, the newest comparioson is a serious Katniss and Peeta but yeah, I would call this better than Hungergames.

Sun, August 12th, 2012 9:04am

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Wow... Thanks alot =)

Sun, August 12th, 2012 3:43am

Miatzu

Very well written. I could feel the emotion. I like it a lot!

Wed, August 15th, 2012 11:52pm

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ThankYou!

Thu, August 23rd, 2012 12:45pm

JaiLoVE

Woah!!!! Tragic love...

Thu, August 23rd, 2012 3:48am

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Thanks=) And yeah...

Thu, August 23rd, 2012 2:14pm

Livebecauseyoucan

That's really good. Really sad though. Flows well and is very emotional. Good job, was moved by your poetry.

Mon, August 27th, 2012 8:53am

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Thanks for the read and comment, much appreciated =)

Mon, August 27th, 2012 10:37am

fallenangel1992

I kind of held my breath and only realized that when i had come to the end.Think you can give a read to my poem "The demons inside my head"

Mon, August 27th, 2012 2:42pm

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Sure

Mon, August 27th, 2012 10:36am

Billy Lingard

This is amazing i don't usually read this kind of thing, but this changed my perspective.

Mon, August 27th, 2012 7:02pm

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Thanks so much for commenting, this made my day =)

Mon, August 27th, 2012 12:29pm

Ian Dawn

Yiour work has a sort of etherial feel to it weather its about love or death its just light and edgey

Thu, September 6th, 2012 11:03pm

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Thank you... =) This made my day!

Fri, September 7th, 2012 5:09am

josephwdonica

I like the way your works flow. They're eloquent, yet not too wordy. I enjoy them.

Tue, September 11th, 2012 3:15pm

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Thank you =)

Tue, September 11th, 2012 8:17am

LilLoCksea

Prepare the ambulance cause i think im having a heart attack! or maybe its just my breath i cant catch hehe* Beautiful!!! I loved this!!!*

Wed, September 12th, 2012 2:07pm

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Thanks so much for the read and comment! I hope you're okay =P

Wed, September 12th, 2012 8:15am

paulbshipley

Yet more of that special 'something incredibly real' that you bring to poetry, thank you again for sharing it with us

Sat, September 15th, 2012 10:26pm

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Thank you very much! Positive feedback means alot =D

Fri, September 21st, 2012 1:39pm

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