Dying In Your Arms Tonight
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Poem by: iola ried
Dying In Your Arms Tonight.
We won't be missed
Once we're gone
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So lets do it today
By tonight we'll fade
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I'm feeling so blue
Nobody cares what I come to
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Take this step with me
Baby, I know it'll set us free
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Loving you shouldn't hurt so bad
It's slowly driven me mad
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So tonight at the barn it'll be
Only when we're gone will they finally see
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That our love was true
I was meant only for you
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In hay blocks we lay
I get the feeling it'll be okay
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As I take away your pain
And you take away mine again
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You slide the knife across my wrist
Lean over and steal my breath with a kiss
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Then cut your lifeline with the blade
Take me in your arms, together we fade
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Your heartbeat fills my ear
We rest in peace, our end is near
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Hand in hand we knock at deaths door
With wings we fly off the floor
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Life's back on track, all went with plan
I couldn't have died in the arms of a better man
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Wow. It's very well written and flows nicely. I like the emotion put into it as well.
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Thanks alot!
Nicely written. This has a rather mix of emotions, Kinda sad, but full of love.
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Thanks! And I'm glad you think so, it was what was intended =]
This is tragic, star-crossed lovers; always a great plot line. It reads a bit like a song. I love reading the work of young writers, there's a lot of potential here.
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Thanks so much =)
ooh you know if you die in hay the hay keeps your body warm and your finders are in hopes that you are still alive .. still I guess your lovers would have blood everywhere giving a slight clue all is not well
I liked it very much
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I didn't know that! And thanks =D
this is amazing, very well written :)
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Thanks=)
Ah, nothing better than a dark love in a beautifully crafted poem.
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Thanks!=)
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thats pretty good
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Thank You
i like it, the flow was like a heart beat nice and steady. very good.
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Thanks alot!
wow... I love it.. so much emotion and love... a great write. you have talent :)
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Thnak you ever so much! =)
I love it as well. It is pure love so simple. Well written.
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Thanks alot!
if i was a girl i would've cried. but i'm not a girl. haha jk great job. I loved it. heaps of emotions in simple lines. great job
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Hahaha, man tears then? =P
Thanxslots! =D
amazing, what love can do:) beautiful poem
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Its an intoxicant, and thanks =)
Simple yet stunning!
I love the romance of this, the newest comparioson is a serious Katniss and Peeta but yeah, I would call this better than Hungergames.
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Wow... Thanks alot =)
Very well written. I could feel the emotion. I like it a lot!
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ThankYou!
Woah!!!! Tragic love...
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Thanks=) And yeah...
That's really good. Really sad though. Flows well and is very emotional. Good job, was moved by your poetry.
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Thanks for the read and comment, much appreciated =)
I kind of held my breath and only realized that when i had come to the end.Think you can give a read to my poem "The demons inside my head"
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Sure
This is amazing i don't usually read this kind of thing, but this changed my perspective.
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Thanks so much for commenting, this made my day =)
Yiour work has a sort of etherial feel to it weather its about love or death its just light and edgey
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Thank you... =) This made my day!
I like the way your works flow. They're eloquent, yet not too wordy. I enjoy them.
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Thank you =)
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