I've Reached The End

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

I'll take the ink from my arms and write your name in the sky...

I've Reached The End

Hope dies

Blood dries

Life cries

For one more try

_

Fate calls

Tears fall

Losing all

Sorrow stands tall

_

Demons rise

Reality sighs

Death replies

No time for goodbyes

_

Building walls

To cure-all

Living small

No life to recall


Submitted: March 26, 2012

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blackNblue101

omg!!that was truly amazing:}i love it check out some of my poems

Mon, March 26th, 2012 9:57pm

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Thanxs! Will do =)

Tue, March 27th, 2012 7:30am

koolc

HI THIS IS KOOC I LIKE UR WORK,I THINK UR A VERY CONSCIOUS PERSON, VERY MYSTERIOUS,BUT A GREAT THINKER, I LIKE UR POEMS A LOT,

Thu, March 29th, 2012 3:18am

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Thank you very much! =D

Fri, March 30th, 2012 1:58pm

Charles Mausolf

Holy crap this can mean so much! You used so many interpretations of things. I loved this yet understood so little at the same time understood so much. I don't get what you felt when you wrote this. It's got so much feeling I was blown by this. Yes it is short, but I am still contemplating this.

Great Fucking (yes I am using the bad word) Work!

Tue, April 17th, 2012 6:07am

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Thanks alot, this made my day! Bad word excused =)

Sat, May 5th, 2012 8:08am

optimysticynic

nice work, very short, powerful stanzas. full of emotion. keep writing!

Sun, April 29th, 2012 11:20pm

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Thanks alot!

Sat, May 5th, 2012 8:05am

StrangeMind

I love this poem! The short line lengths are really effective, and you use such emotive language! I particularly like the third stanza, with the personification of reality and death.
Great work :)

Sun, May 13th, 2012 5:32pm

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Thank you so much, it means alot =)

Sun, May 20th, 2012 5:30am

soccergirl

yet again, an amazing poem. awesome job

Tue, May 29th, 2012 12:57pm

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And thank you, for the I-don't-know-what-time =D
It means alot that you read my poems and commented, can't say how much I appreciate it, thank you =)

Sat, June 2nd, 2012 5:19am

siirdarkmaz

very short but surprisingly strong. Didn't expect it that way. You surprise me in many ways

Mon, July 30th, 2012 10:03am

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Thank you very much =)

Wed, August 1st, 2012 2:19pm

jenny2801

its amazing how such a short poem can be filled with a list of emotions so long! Truly amazing, keep up the good work!

Wed, August 8th, 2012 1:06am

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ThankYouSoMuch! =D

Wed, August 8th, 2012 2:12pm

Jarvis

nice.., not that long but explains everything

Fri, August 10th, 2012 11:41am

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Thanks, it means alot =)

Fri, August 10th, 2012 2:10pm

Ali Hassan Fakhoury

That was really nice, I loved the way of making it short but still meaningfull!
I will for sure read all of your poems 'casuse I know they will be great!

Sun, August 12th, 2012 11:25am

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N'aww thanks, your positive feedback makes my day =D

Sun, August 12th, 2012 2:16pm

Soul_Dreamer

OMG one of the best poems i have read!
if you could would you be able to read some of my peoms, that would be great, let me know what you think!
keep up the great writing :)

Tue, August 14th, 2012 5:37am

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Thanks and will do =)

Thu, August 23rd, 2012 12:43pm

FixMyHeart

I liked it

Sun, August 26th, 2012 3:51pm

Author
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Thanks for taking the time to read =)

Sun, August 26th, 2012 9:08am

kilgoretrou77687

This my first time reading your work and I have to say I really like the style of this one. I'll be for sure reading more from you.

Mon, August 27th, 2012 10:45pm

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Thanks, very much appreciated XD

Tue, August 28th, 2012 6:19am

Ian Dawn

Nice your work is very good. As I have said before if you feel the words it makes it so much easier to believe them and I feel you are connected to your writing so It is so easy to read and understand

Thu, September 6th, 2012 11:04pm

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Most of my poetry is written when I'm feeling really emotional, I'm glad you can understand. Thanks alot for commentng =)

Fri, September 7th, 2012 5:08am

Dean2118

First of all thanks for your comments on my poetry, thank you! This poem is simple but for that you have limited scope to convey your message and you do this very well! In my eyes I see it represents a pyschological struggle. 'Hope Dies..Fate calls... Demons rise.. Building walls' Excellent assessment of the human condition and to do so in such few words.. you show promise as a great poet! xx

Mon, September 17th, 2012 9:55pm

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Wow... Thanks Dean! Its great to hear someone say that =D And you're most welcome =)

Fri, September 21st, 2012 1:41pm

Dean Talbot

Very emotional even in so few words, just could have had a supportive end to it and it would have been high on my list of great poems. Regardless, EXTREMELY well done!

Tue, October 9th, 2012 4:56pm

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Thank you, I'll have a look back over it :)

Tue, October 9th, 2012 10:02am

ed safin

Very very good

Thu, October 11th, 2012 2:11pm

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Thank you :)

Thu, October 11th, 2012 7:30am

Biya

Wow! It was short, yet I felt so many powerful emotions in it. Your words flowed brilliantly. Great work! :)

Sat, October 13th, 2012 2:49pm

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Thanks lots! :D

Sat, October 13th, 2012 8:31am

Aquabluestar

In every sentence, it feels like you have poured you emotions. The short sentences give the poem a great effect. Well done ^^

Mon, October 15th, 2012 7:52pm

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Thank you very much :D It means a lot to me :)

Mon, October 15th, 2012 1:23pm

carramclaren

Thta was such a short poem yet it was the best one i've read!!!!

Mon, October 15th, 2012 8:28pm

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Thanks! :D

Mon, October 15th, 2012 1:40pm

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