On The Brink Of Ruin
Poem by: iola ried
On The Brink Of Ruin.
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Trying to move to the rhythm of life
Rather than the monotonous silent screams of death
Hanging onto sanity by a single thread
On the edge, so close to slipping away
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Standing on two feet yet falling into black hole
Dragged down by the trials and tribulations of life
Hoping to see the welcoming beams of light
But being tormented by the demons of the night
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Balancing inevitably on the edge of a cliff
All left worth fighting for fading away
Given up on hope of happiness to come
Dreams collapse like shattered glass
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Stand your grand, do not fall prey
After the storm comes suns rays
Theres no need to feel like dying today
Smile through the tears, its going to be okay...
© Copyright 2017 iola ried. All rights reserved.
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This poem was a bit.. random to me. I can't follow the rhyming in the poem. =S
Looking past that: great message in the poem. And great choice of words, the imagery was great! =)
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Thanks anyway =)
Love the poem its very interesting and true... :)
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Thankyou =D
I enjoyed it. Bit sad but so real
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Thanks again =)
really nice. Im a fan
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Thank you, for both =)
Hey I really like the lines in this, on my Deviant art I put lyrics or quotes with pictures I draw, do you mind if I use a line from your poem in one of my pictures? I'll give you credit for the line and also will put you're url for booksie in the description of the pic, so is it ok if I use a quote from your poem?
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Wow... Yeah, sure, go ahead =) I'd love to see the picture when its done =D (This totally made my day!)
I loved this poem. It's so real, the emotions are like, tangible. Sometimes I just feel like I'm dead, and I'm just walking around in this body or whatever. Where are you getting all this wonderful inspiration from??!? This makes me not want to write, because I know that I'll never be good as your poems. -.- Hehe, I'm glad you came onto my profile and started talking about the whole spinning chairs thing so I could check out your stuff. (:
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Wow girl, thanks alot for this! It means so much to me, and please keep writing=)
I like the darkness in your words I think yiou might like some of my stuff I have a darkside but there are messages left in them from the heart see if you understand come on over and have a read, If your game!
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I sure will! Thanks for the reads =D
Hi Iola,
An interesting poem. One thing about depression or extreme sadness is that others, who have not had it find it hard to understand.
You might like to read my poem (The Enemy of my Enemy) which is along similar lines.
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Hello Simon, you're very much right. I still remember looking oddly at others who talked of being depressed and problems getting them down in life, now that I've seen the world through thier eyes, I understand only too well... I guess you only really know what its like when you stand in someone else's shoes.
I'll be sure to check it out! =)
Thanks for the read and comment =)
oh wow. i don't think you could possibly know how much this poem meant to me. ? Lovely poem. Love your wide vocab, lolz.
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Your feedback means alot to me too :D Thanks bunches for the read and comment :)
And yet again a poem to live by! Perfect!
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Thanks! :D
Again, WOW! Lots of phenomenal lines I really like, and all of them are beautifully written. I'm wordless right now at how amazing your poems can be, since it's just got the good quality in it. I LOVED IT. Keep writing!
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Thanks so much! :D
Really great poem, I especially likes the second and fourth verses
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Thank you very much for both the read and comment:)
Really great poem, I especially likes the second and fourth verses
Ghonesis