On The Brink Of Ruin

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

P.s- Don't give up so soon, there is still hope for you.

On The Brink Of Ruin.

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Trying to move to the rhythm of life

Rather than the monotonous silent screams of death

Hanging onto sanity by a single thread

On the edge, so close to slipping away

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Standing on two feet yet falling into black hole

Dragged down by the trials and tribulations of life

Hoping to see the welcoming beams of light

But being tormented by the demons of the night

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Balancing inevitably on the edge of a cliff

All left worth fighting for fading away

Given up on hope of happiness to come

Dreams collapse like shattered glass

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Stand your grand, do not fall prey

After the storm comes suns rays

Theres no need to feel like dying today

Smile through the tears, its going to be okay...


Submitted: March 15, 2012

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Ghonesis

This poem was a bit.. random to me. I can't follow the rhyming in the poem. =S
Looking past that: great message in the poem. And great choice of words, the imagery was great! =)

Sun, March 18th, 2012 7:49pm

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Thanks anyway =)

Sat, March 24th, 2012 10:26am

NervousSublimeKitty

Love the poem its very interesting and true... :)

Mon, March 19th, 2012 3:08pm

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Thankyou =D

Sat, March 24th, 2012 8:32am

angel plant

I enjoyed it. Bit sad but so real

Sat, July 28th, 2012 1:23am

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Thanks again =)

Sun, July 29th, 2012 2:28pm

siirdarkmaz

really nice. Im a fan

Sun, July 29th, 2012 11:38pm

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Thank you, for both =)

Wed, August 1st, 2012 2:42pm

PinkNotes

Hey I really like the lines in this, on my Deviant art I put lyrics or quotes with pictures I draw, do you mind if I use a line from your poem in one of my pictures? I'll give you credit for the line and also will put you're url for booksie in the description of the pic, so is it ok if I use a quote from your poem?

Wed, August 8th, 2012 2:50am

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Wow... Yeah, sure, go ahead =) I'd love to see the picture when its done =D (This totally made my day!)

Wed, August 8th, 2012 2:17pm

Ian Dawn

I like the darkness in your words I think yiou might like some of my stuff I have a darkside but there are messages left in them from the heart see if you understand come on over and have a read, If your game!

Thu, September 6th, 2012 11:06pm

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I sure will! Thanks for the reads =D

Fri, September 7th, 2012 5:06am

Simon Streeton

Hi Iola,
An interesting poem. One thing about depression or extreme sadness is that others, who have not had it find it hard to understand.
You might like to read my poem (The Enemy of my Enemy) which is along similar lines.

Thu, September 20th, 2012 2:23pm

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Hello Simon, you're very much right. I still remember looking oddly at others who talked of being depressed and problems getting them down in life, now that I've seen the world through thier eyes, I understand only too well... I guess you only really know what its like when you stand in someone else's shoes.
I'll be sure to check it out! =)
Thanks for the read and comment =)

Fri, September 21st, 2012 1:49pm

ZAC XD

oh wow. i don't think you could possibly know how much this poem meant to me. ? Lovely poem. Love your wide vocab, lolz.

Sun, October 7th, 2012 11:04am

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Your feedback means alot to me too :D Thanks bunches for the read and comment :)

Sun, October 7th, 2012 5:03am

Dean Talbot

And yet again a poem to live by! Perfect!

Tue, October 9th, 2012 4:53pm

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Thanks! :D

Tue, October 9th, 2012 9:59am

Biya

Again, WOW! Lots of phenomenal lines I really like, and all of them are beautifully written. I'm wordless right now at how amazing your poems can be, since it's just got the good quality in it. I LOVED IT. Keep writing!

Sat, October 13th, 2012 3:00pm

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Thanks so much! :D

Sat, October 13th, 2012 3:57pm

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