On The Brink Of Ruin.
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Trying to move to the rhythm of life
Rather than the monotonous silent screams of death
Hanging onto sanity by a single thread
On the edge, so close to slipping away
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Standing on two feet yet falling into black hole
Dragged down by the trials and tribulations of life
Hoping to see the welcoming beams of light
But being tormented by the demons of the night
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Balancing inevitably on the edge of a cliff
All left worth fighting for fading away
Given up on hope of happiness to come
Dreams collapse like shattered glass
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Stand your grand, do not fall prey
After the storm comes suns rays
Theres no need to feel like dying today
Smile through the tears, its going to be okay...
Submitted: March 15, 2012
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Love the poem its very interesting and true... :)
Mon, March 19th, 2012 3:08pm
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Thankyou =D
Sat, March 24th, 2012 8:32am
I enjoyed it. Bit sad but so real
Sat, July 28th, 2012 1:23am
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Thanks again =)
Sun, July 29th, 2012 2:28pm
really nice. Im a fan
Sun, July 29th, 2012 11:38pm
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Thank you, for both =)
Wed, August 1st, 2012 2:42pm
Hey I really like the lines in this, on my Deviant art I put lyrics or quotes with pictures I draw, do you mind if I use a line from your poem in one of my pictures? I'll give you credit for the line and also will put you're url for booksie in the description of the pic, so is it ok if I use a quote from your poem?
Wed, August 8th, 2012 2:50am
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Wow... Yeah, sure, go ahead =) I'd love to see the picture when its done =D (This totally made my day!)
Wed, August 8th, 2012 2:17pm
I like the darkness in your words I think yiou might like some of my stuff I have a darkside but there are messages left in them from the heart see if you understand come on over and have a read, If your game!
Thu, September 6th, 2012 11:06pm
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I sure will! Thanks for the reads =D
Fri, September 7th, 2012 5:06am
Hi Iola,
An interesting poem. One thing about depression or extreme sadness is that others, who have not had it find it hard to understand.
You might like to read my poem (The Enemy of my Enemy) which is along similar lines.
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Hello Simon, you're very much right. I still remember looking oddly at others who talked of being depressed and problems getting them down in life, now that I've seen the world through thier eyes, I understand only too well... I guess you only really know what its like when you stand in someone else's shoes.
I'll be sure to check it out! =)
Thanks for the read and comment =)
oh wow. i don't think you could possibly know how much this poem meant to me. ? Lovely poem. Love your wide vocab, lolz.
Sun, October 7th, 2012 11:04am
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Your feedback means alot to me too :D Thanks bunches for the read and comment :)
Sun, October 7th, 2012 5:03am
And yet again a poem to live by! Perfect!
Tue, October 9th, 2012 4:53pm
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Thanks! :D
Tue, October 9th, 2012 9:59am
Again, WOW! Lots of phenomenal lines I really like, and all of them are beautifully written. I'm wordless right now at how amazing your poems can be, since it's just got the good quality in it. I LOVED IT. Keep writing!
Sat, October 13th, 2012 3:00pm
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Thanks so much! :D
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This poem was a bit.. random to me. I can't follow the rhyming in the poem. =S
Sun, March 18th, 2012 7:49pmLooking past that: great message in the poem. And great choice of words, the imagery was great! =)
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Thanks anyway =)
Sat, March 24th, 2012 10:26am