Broken Wishings

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Written when I realized that, for the first time ever, I might actually love a guy, and not just like him; soon followed by the realization that he probably didn't feel the same way.

Sometimes
I wish
That he
Could look
At me
The way other guys
Look at their girls

Sometimes
I wish
That he
Would kiss me
Like he meant it,
Like I'm the best thing in the world

Sometimes
I wish
That he
Could be
More
Than just a friend should

Sometimes
I wish
That he
Could love me
More than he loves common sense
And morality

But

It's stupid
To keep wishing
Because I know
That he
Will never want me
The way I wish he could

Submitted: January 27, 2013

Romance love heartbreak sad longing hopeless

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E. J. Rylee

This is so incredibly out of your usual writing style, but I like it. I can still hear a lot of you in it.

Where do you get the rhythms for your poetry??? I want them!

Excellent job, once again. Keep up the good work! Let me know when you've written more :D

Sun, January 27th, 2013 9:15pm

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Thanks, EJ :P the rhythms just sort of come to me, so it's rather hard to share them, but you're welcome to try.
And thank you for your support :D I'll try to get more up soon.

Sun, January 27th, 2013 1:18pm

lost love long forgotten

This is an incredible poem. I really enjoy the way you wrote this poem. I feel this way a lot sometimes but its really good to know theres others out there who feel the same way.

Sun, January 27th, 2013 10:53pm

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I'm so glad it connected with you :) it's always an amazing feeling to read a poem and go, "That's how I feel!" :D it's one of my favorite parts of writing.

Sun, January 27th, 2013 3:04pm

Indie Skreet

... by the way, just in case you are wondering - one was to my estranged husband which I actually verbalised - the other to another, and only in my head :) ps I can spell, but USA spell-check claims I can't!

Wed, February 13th, 2013 3:09am

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It's ok, it does that to me too :P and I'm sorry to hear about your husband :(

Tue, February 12th, 2013 7:11pm

bobthebuilder

I like this. It's emotional and rhythmic, and feels very real.

Wed, February 27th, 2013 1:59am

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Yay! ^-^ was there anything you thought I could change to make the piece better?

Tue, February 26th, 2013 8:26pm

Stormbird Throneshaker

This definitely came from the soul that cried out to the heart to pen this with its dreams, hopes and wishes!
Has he ever seen this or is he past history?
This would be his wake up call for sure!
Got to vote a like on this one as well.

Fri, March 1st, 2013 12:35pm

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It was just sort of sad wishing at the time....sad, irritated, hopeless, though never quite despairing. Our lives have parted ways and I still like him but not the way I used to. I guess I just let things go, and now they're gone and I'm not regretful of it.

Fri, March 1st, 2013 4:47pm

Indie Skreet

Oh dear, these are the words I spoke only a few weeks ago and then again today. Worded perfectly.

Fri, April 12th, 2013 2:18am

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I'm glad you liked it :)

Thu, April 11th, 2013 7:18pm