Walking Down The Creek

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Young Adult  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is not a happy story. Don't read if you don't want to be like, 'AWW!! That was sad.'

She staggers along the river as her white cotton skirt drags on the ground. She notices nothing, not even that her skirt is becoming tattered and torn from the twigs that reach up from the water. All she feels is the wind in her hair and the grass beneath her feet. She is oblivious to the blood running down her wrists onto the ground. Her balance is off and she feels weak but she also feels completely alive even though she is slowly dying. This is peace, she thinks.

Faintly, she hears her name from behind. She doesn't bother to turn around for she knows who it is. The boy catches up to her and screams at the horrific sight of his love's blood falling helplessly to the ground. She stops and turns to him. She is smiling a pale smile, the blood slowing draining from her body, making her whiter than usual. She falls limp to the ground, finally feeling the effect of the slits on her wrists. He doesn't know what to do with her limp body so he gathers her up in his arms and tells her that everything is okay while he strokes her hair. She touches his face, drying up the last remains of her body's strength. He holds her hand there with his over top, wishing the cold warmth of it would never go away. He feels the last few drops of her blood fall down his shirt and onto his chest.

Why, he wants to know but there is no one there to answer him. He looks down at her. Her eyes are open but lifeless. Her pale pink smile is still on her lips. He kisses her forehead and hugs her tighter. The driver of a passing car sees them and stops. He runs down the bank to the boy holding onto the lifeless girl. He phones in the scene to the local PD then tries to pry the young man off of the dead girl. He screams out "No, no!" but the driver is stronger and pulls him over to the car.The boy surrenders and sits by the back tire, staring in the direction of the girl. She lay still near the edge of the water until the police disturb her body.

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Submitted: June 20, 2010

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dixiepixie

Wow! Why?!UPdate me?

Sun, June 20th, 2010 1:15pm

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It's just a simple short story that I wrote during one of my depressions. There is nothing to update. Thank you for liking it though.

Sun, June 20th, 2010 6:31am

darkism

nice story,i like it.

Sun, June 20th, 2010 2:39pm

Abigail Granger

...
Just....
....
This is honestly and seriously 100% amazing.
You can tell how upset I am because of all the "..."s...
I've never read anything so short that had so much meaning and passion. Three paragraphs. That's all it took for someone's heart to be wrenched out of their chest for a minute or two...(And that someone being me! And others, not doubt).
You've got some serious talent here. And I'm not just saying that.
Love it.
LOVE IT!

Sun, June 20th, 2010 3:45pm

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Well thank you very much!

Sun, June 20th, 2010 8:55am

Sierra MacKenzie

I really liked it. :) I wonder what made the girl do what she did. Hmmm....:)

Sun, June 20th, 2010 7:49pm

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I'm not sure. This story was just kind of a randomly written one when I was in 9th grade.

Mon, June 21st, 2010 2:31am

LOYAL SOUL

whoa this is deep and beautiful i ave no shame in saying that even if im a male it brings out emotions within anyone but since im souless not me but beautiful story.. 10/10

Sun, June 20th, 2010 11:00pm

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=]

Mon, June 21st, 2010 2:33am

rainbow skittles

Why not turn this into a full story? Its good and your pretty good with your discriptions. I love it-its really good. I think you should turn it into a full story. :D any other stories id be more than happy to read.

Mon, June 21st, 2010 3:16pm

LegallyBrunette2332

amazing detail...i felt like i was there witnessing it :)
in a way, its a good thing that this is a short story, because it leaves people wanting more...but that's also why it could be bad thing x)
but i really liked this, and the part when he held her in his arms was my favorite.
please update me on any more writing you do, and great job on this one :)
and if you haven't already, please check out my story, Music Class
there's the link(:
http://www.booksie.com/other/novel/legallybrunette2332/music-class

Thu, June 24th, 2010 10:49am

Fashionzombie

I loved it and I think it remains better as a short story ^^

Thu, June 24th, 2010 11:41am

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Well thank you Fashion :) At least some one likes it to be a short story.

Thu, June 24th, 2010 11:00pm

Nacre Aura

How emotional!!! Ur a gr8 writer...

Sun, July 4th, 2010 3:54am

midnightvampire

painfully i understand, this is a good storry.

Wed, August 25th, 2010 2:28pm

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