The story of two waring lovers

Swords clash with each embrace,
As two warring lovers stand face to face.
An unwavering forces flare with fierce fire
Against an instant icy wall fuelled with ire.
Crimson claws flash out to cleave at the crystal heart.
Blue blitz blasts back the fatal attack.
A thousand splinters scatter with pain…
Fire is slain by fast falling rain.
Love lies in ruin…
Silent death takes it into its bosom.
Kicking back to survive
But they cannot leave their sharpened knives.
Crimson eyes peer into the blue,
Try to find the glistering silver due.
Cast aside the lonely path
And accept me as part of the aftermath.
So sharp it slices through silent screams of suffering.
My warm fire has gone…
Blank, cold and alone…
I stare at an old face of bone…
All I want is to turn to stone.

Submitted: September 16, 2010

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Jaques Smit:

Interesting, entertaining, imaginative and thought-provoking. Unusual choice and treatment of theme.

Gave it an "I Like It" vote. As with your other postings. At times, without commenting. All well deserved.

Thank you for becoming a fan. Appreciative and grateful. You are most kind, thoughtful and considerate.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Tue, September 28th, 2010 5:21pm


Thanks for the kind words Ed. You have alot more stuff, it will take me a while to get through it all, but I will return the favour.

Tue, September 28th, 2010 4:28pm


AMAZING, really AWESOME.... it says all, you really got me with a single poem :D

Great one, keep up the work

Thanks for the read,
-John Smith

Thu, December 2nd, 2010 10:59am


Thanks for the review mate. glad you enjoyed it ;)

Thu, December 2nd, 2010 6:15pm


Wow, that was really amazing the choice of words really are fantastic, i loved it. Its so imaginitve HOW DO YOU DO MANAGE IT. it so damm good, reall.

thanks for becoming my fan really apreciate, thank you.

Keep up the good work!


Mon, December 27th, 2010 4:59pm


Painful life experience verbalised into a poem :P Thanks for the kind words.

Mon, December 27th, 2010 10:06am


Nice! Very nice. Great choice of words and it flowed smoothly.

Mon, January 24th, 2011 9:44am


Thanks a lot for the compliment Angellynn. I'm always happy to hear some one enjoyed my poetry.

Mon, January 24th, 2011 6:42pm

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