Imprisoned!

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Horror  |  House: Booksie Classic

Just a horror story I made up. This is the first chapter, please tell me what you think below. Xx

 

The ancient house at the edge of town had not been lived in for 250 years. The teenagers in the town used to go up to the house and throw stones at the windows, and make fires in the overgrown garden. Until 50 years ago a boy named James Collins decided he would go inside the house with his girlfriend Emma Waters. They went upstairs to explore the rooms when they saw a little girl with hair as black as the night around them with lips were as red as the blood dripping from them, all of a sudden she disappeared.

Emma was begging James to leave this ancient haunted house, however he told her to stop overreacting. James ran into a bedroom and Emma was left by herself in the gloomy hallway. She went to follow him, but the girl appeared in front of her as she turned to do so. Emma screamed and James ran out, the blood-dripping girl had disappeared again and Emma was left there screaming.

The boy left her there again and she walked into the bathroom. Emma looked into the bath to find it filled with blood and a corpse, she tried to scream but nothing came out. She spun around to leave the bathroom as she did she saw that the door had closed behind her, however it wasn’t that that was freaky it was the fact that there was another dead body hanging from the door. Blood was collecting on the floor in a puddle, their eyes had been gouged out, an axe was stuck half way through their head and the scratches on their face made it impossible to tell if they were male or female.

Just as she was about to scream again someone covered her mouth and slit her throat. Emma fell to the floor and her red, red blood poured onto the dirty white floor. After 10 minutes James went into the bathroom to look for her, when he got to the door he saw it was covered in Emma’s blood. It read: Her death won’t be the last. More blood will be spilt. Run away fast. Before there is guilt. Emma was sweet, but you never listened. So now you will be here, always imprisoned. 


Submitted: April 01, 2012

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ImaginativeTraveler

gosh, i think i may have just wet my pants....:S
scary good. :) hehe

Sun, April 1st, 2012 8:28pm

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Thanks. Do you want me to keep you updated? Xx

Sun, April 1st, 2012 11:29pm

Aurisa

Very few "scary" stories make my skin crawl, but this made my skin crawl.

Sun, April 1st, 2012 9:59pm

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Thanks. I didn't know if it was that scary, but it obviously is. Do you want me to keep you updated? Xx

Sun, April 1st, 2012 11:27pm

Pretty Little Rich Girls

WoW! We think this story is so scary. The little poem at the end was so freaky, we're going to repeat that in front of a mirror in the dark and see if anything happens. Don't think we're going to be able to sleep tonight. LOL! xx

Mon, April 2nd, 2012 4:19pm

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LOL. Thanks, I had to write something like this for an exam the other day so I just thought why not put it on Booksie. I'm so glad it's so scary. Xx

Mon, April 2nd, 2012 11:17pm

Hanah Eve

Loved that little poem at the end! Loved how you could make it sound horrific and gory at the same time without overdoing the details. One more like for you:)

Tue, May 22nd, 2012 2:50am

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Awww thanks. I'm glad you liked it. I've been so busy lately that I haven't been able to finish the next part to the story. I'll try and I have it up as soon as I can. xxx

Fri, May 25th, 2012 10:17am

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