A choice unwise

Poem by: jaylisbeth

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Noir: Confessions from Lisbeth.

She said goodbye feeling unsure,

He’s a good man; his heart is pure.

But she’s not ready,

To move on steady.

His eyes she’ll never forget,

This decision she might regret.

But she’s afraid; she’s been in pain,

Her heart is cured but she’ll refrain.

His arms so manly and too sublime,

To let him go will be a crime.

But she’s accustomed to being alone,

She thought she liked being on her own.

She’s a strong woman but after all,

There’s nothing that will break her fall.

To let him go; a choice unwise,

Perhaps this hurt is now my price.

Submitted: August 14, 2017

Romance love end fear goodbye

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Amy Furzane

Indeed a popular indecisive choice, whether to let go or hold on to something or someone. And we’re always left battling with the thought of ‘what ifs’ and ‘what nots’ in life; really liked the message behind this poem. I liked how you put them into words and how each sentences rhyme. Good work! :)

Mon, August 14th, 2017 1:30pm

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Thank you very much, Amy for such a kind comment :)

Mon, August 14th, 2017 6:31am

M.S. Sagar

Beautiful peom and rhym is also cool. We must not lose the good people in our life, is the basic theme I this poem. While the theme of loneliness may be founded in all of your works.

Mon, August 14th, 2017 1:47pm

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Thank you very much, I appreciate it greatly.

Mon, August 14th, 2017 7:01am

Rehmat Tanzila

Lovely lines, lovely cover photo a by the loveliest writer friend of mine! Just amazing! And yes the loveliest title as well! you'll go so far my friend!

Mon, August 14th, 2017 3:35pm

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Thank you, my love. Your comments are very motivational :)

Mon, August 14th, 2017 9:42am

hullabaloo22

Nicely composed, jaylisbeth. A lot of feeling with excellent rhyme!

Mon, August 14th, 2017 5:44pm

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Thank you, Hully :)

Mon, August 14th, 2017 10:46am

Mike S.

Here's what you do, J.B, just write a different ending, everybody wins!

Mon, August 14th, 2017 6:23pm

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That just might work, Mike :) It's fiction though. Thank you, always.

Mon, August 14th, 2017 11:29am

Tom Allen714

A Very Nice Piece, lots of feelings... Tom...

Mon, August 14th, 2017 11:30pm

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Thank you, Tom. It's merely fiction, just a little short story in the form of a poem.

Mon, August 14th, 2017 5:16pm

Spyguy

My stars, the night illuminates, by blackness all around...
Your eyes, my dear, through poetry, give luminescence, sight, & sound!
Strength you have, aplenty, courage, grace, & love...
Sharing of your feelings dear, enlightened from above!
Pain you have, & pain you'll know, unfortunately so...
That is my sweet, a truthful blow, that winter brings it's snow!

Tue, August 15th, 2017 7:26am

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Such a beautiful comment, Spy :)

Tue, August 15th, 2017 5:10am