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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Noir: Confessions from Lisbeth

I’ve done something wrong, I’ve made a mistake,

I was given a heart I swore not to break.

I don’t know what happened, forgive what I’ve said,

The pain in your heart, the words in my head.


I wish I could show you that I’m not unkind,

To have hurt you, I’m sorry, I’m losing my mind.

Pleading forgiveness while holding my breath,

What have you done, careless Lisbeth?


I left you resenting that I had to leave,

The fact that I broke you I cannot believe.

You are my everything, my safe haven, indeed,

And I hope that this letter someday you’ll read.


I promise I love you and I don’t know how,

I look in the mirror; I’m the heartbreaker now.

Careless and vain and now I lament,

I was angry inside to hurt you I meant.


And now you’re in mourning I caused your heart’s death,

Now look what you’ve done, callous Lisbeth.

Submitted: September 07, 2017

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Rehmat Tanzila

So emotional and heartfelt! God this second last stanza took my breath away!!! Just amazing!

Thu, September 7th, 2017 12:38pm


Thank you, my sweet love :)

Thu, September 7th, 2017 5:39am

Amy Furzane

So much truth about regretting the mistakes done and hoping there is room for forgiveness. Sometimes to love someone is to hurt them, unintentionally. Just to add, love heals, but also kills; and often we get confused by both. Nice piece here I could relate to it in so many ways, good work! :)

Thu, September 7th, 2017 1:46pm


Thank you very much, Amy.

Thu, September 7th, 2017 7:03am


What shall I say about this poem? It's great! It's digging deep into the self--and out it comes!

Thu, September 7th, 2017 2:24pm


Thank you, John. I am so glad you think so.

Thu, September 7th, 2017 9:41am


Amazing. For some odd reason I got teary eyed. And I am a man who almost never cries. I have a very tough exterior. But , this got to me. Maybe because I can relate to these words. Very nice writing. Very enjoyable.

Thu, September 7th, 2017 4:34pm


Thank you very much for taking the time to read my poem. I appreciate it very much . I'm sorry that it got you somewhat teary :'(

Thu, September 7th, 2017 9:37am


I'm not going to say anything other than 'Brilliantly done', jaylisbeth.

Thu, September 7th, 2017 6:29pm


Thank you, Hully. Hope you liked it.

Thu, September 7th, 2017 12:51pm

Mike S.

Pretty hard on yourself, aren't you? Anyway, a fine poem, J.B!

Thu, September 7th, 2017 10:22pm


Thank you very much, Mike. I was little hard on myself.

Thu, September 7th, 2017 5:42pm


I love how you talk to yourself amid talking to him, & using the italicizations as your "Inner voice"!

Fri, September 15th, 2017 8:59pm


Yes! That s exactly what I did on purpose by using the italics. :)

Fri, September 15th, 2017 6:27pm

Tom Allen714

I really liked seeing you on the other side of love Jaylisbeth, you should look from that angle more often...Tom...

Sun, December 10th, 2017 9:17pm


Ha Ha! Yes, sir, Tom, I agree.

Sun, December 10th, 2017 4:29pm

Chelsey Waters

Oh my goodness, this is so beautiful and so stirring. This brought tears to my eyes. Well done.

Mon, December 11th, 2017 5:30am


Awwww well thank you, very much :)

Mon, December 11th, 2017 4:46am

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