What I dreamt

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: True Confessions  |  House: Vintage Publishing


This is what I dreamt...


Last night I dreamt I lost it all,

And all my dreams had hit the wall.

Last night I dreamt of our demise,

That I got reckless, perhaps, unwise.

 

I dreamt you packed just to depart,

As it was me who broke your heart.

And in a gasp I was awake,

And so my hands began to shake.

 

I saw the pain that you proclaim,

I can’t believe I was to blame.

And as I saw you by my side,

Very silently I cried.

 

It was a dream; I was asleep,

I’ve never seen you hurt that deep.

A guilty conscience I contain,

My true betrayal would cause you pain.


Submitted: January 12, 2018

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LeParadisNoirPoetique

Your dreams contain a very sinister presence, because they feel as real as eyes being open, perhaps more. This dream has a sinister presence because of the last verse you wrote, because your dream is telling you of a truth. It would be harrowing if it was real life, and not the dream itself. For all it is a dream, it is more a nightmare because it is making you the cause of it all, so when you wake up in the morning, you know it was only a dream. It's such beautiful poetry, and I can only dream about your rhyming. Because of that last verse alone it is one of your best poems. Just remember Lisbeth, it is only a dream, and a dream that has no truth in reality. Hope you are feeling better.

Fri, January 12th, 2018 1:22pm

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Thank you very much, Dexter. I tend to forget what I dream within minutes of waking up, but this dream was completely different. I remember everything to the smallest detail. Thank you for reading :) when I woke up, it took me a few minutes to land back to reality and realize it was just a dream.

Fri, January 12th, 2018 5:29am

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Adam L.

Quite the dream, Lis! You have one of the most beautiful rhymes I've seen in your poetry here. Nicely done! Lucid dreamer

Fri, January 12th, 2018 1:35pm

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Thank you so much, Adam :)

Fri, January 12th, 2018 6:51am

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rrwrites0

???? speechless

Fri, January 12th, 2018 2:26pm

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rrwrites0

So beautiful

Fri, January 12th, 2018 2:27pm

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Thank you so much

Fri, January 12th, 2018 6:50am

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hullabaloo22

They are the worst, jaylisbeth, the nightmares that could be true. Beautifully put into words, as always.

Fri, January 12th, 2018 6:44pm

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Thank you very much, Hully :)

Fri, January 12th, 2018 10:49am

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Sue Harris

Beautiful poem JB... those rhymes are just breathtaking. A dream or a vision? A semblance of truth maybe.

Fri, January 12th, 2018 8:18pm

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Thank you so much, Sue :)

Fri, January 12th, 2018 12:28pm

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Mike S.

Sounds like a bad dream, J.B. I too had a dream last night, involving a giant naked inflatable woman. Actually, it turned into a nightmare when I couldn't get the bicycle pump to work!

Fri, January 12th, 2018 10:33pm

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Ha!! Nightmares are just so draining the following day. It's difficult to go back to sleep after. Thank you so much, Mike.

Fri, January 12th, 2018 2:35pm

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Spyguy

I’m the kind of guy who lives to make other people’s dreams come true... But not for this type of dream! I love your work!

Sat, January 13th, 2018 8:20am

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Thank you so much, Spy :)

Sat, January 13th, 2018 11:40am

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2die4

i have no words
i dont even know what to say..
i loved this
like wow
it hit home for me
its like what i felt in my teens. idk im just like lost for words.loll

Sat, January 13th, 2018 10:16am

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Thank you so much :)

Sat, January 13th, 2018 11:39am

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Jeff Bezaire

Always remember, it was just a dream. Dreams have an odd way of expressing our fears, hidden truth, and what we cannot see in front of us, but they are not revealed in such an obvious way in our dreams. It takes careful dissection of a dream to uncover its meaning - even the obvious may not be so obvious when you peel back the layers. Dreams that make sense are the worst kind - they're always the most stressful and oftentimes are nightmares for me. I prefer the confusing kind of dream that leaves you in wonder when you wake up.
If you're ever interested in analyzing your dreams, here's a handy website that's easier to use than a dream book: www.dreammoods.com
I hope your dreams have been cheerier of late! Or at least less sensical. :)

Sun, January 14th, 2018 8:32pm

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Thank you, Jeff. I have always been an avid fan of deciphering the meaning of dreams. I really appreciate the recommendation :)

Sun, January 14th, 2018 9:10pm

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Criss Sole

Dreams can be worse than reality. Love the rhyming. Great poem.

Thu, February 8th, 2018 5:56am

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Thank you, Criss. I really did dream this. I felt so badly in the morning.

Thu, February 8th, 2018 5:45am

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