In that Age

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

How darkness flows into some ages.

into those ages when

and the shy.

to ebb and flow continuously,

"Who am I, who am I, who am I?"

 

in an effort to fit,

noted.

is the elephant in the room

swaying from side to side.

 

within the mind

far less shy.

even loader,

"Who am I, who am I, who am I?"

 

 

JE Falcon

2-05-2016

 


Submitted: February 05, 2016

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AlnesAbe

Nice Writing ?

Fri, February 5th, 2016 10:09pm

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Thanks!

Sat, February 6th, 2016 1:30pm

JoelatRpg

This was a very well written poem. What I like about the first stanza is that the question arises 'Who am I' which I interpret as someone trying to figure out who they are, what they like, their hobbies, themselves. And I also like how 'Who am I' repeats three times, it sounds very poetic. 'Fitting is not the problem noted' I think strengthens the poem's message that people should be themselves. I'm different than a lot of people too, so I can relate to this poem. I enjoyed reading this, JE! Thanks for sharing! I've got to add this to my shelf.

Fri, July 1st, 2016 9:12pm

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Thanks so much...

Sat, July 2nd, 2016 10:33am

unmasked delusions

This one is very haunting, especially with those repeating lines "who am I". Really makes you think; nice work.

Wed, February 1st, 2017 11:50pm

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Much thanks, I am happy you liked it.

Fri, February 3rd, 2017 9:41am

Darklady

very simple but well written yet in my point of view darkness has no age to flow, sadly, I've been into it for too long now

Sat, May 27th, 2017 3:00pm

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Thanks, I think.

Tue, June 6th, 2017 11:48am

jaylisbeth

Very well done. Such an expressive piece.

Thu, December 28th, 2017 4:43am

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Thank you, I do pay attention to feed-back. --- This was one of my philosophical moments. This started out to be a much longer poem, but edit I did. --- Have a great new year...

Thu, December 28th, 2017 9:26am

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