Forbidden love Part 1(AngelicAttitude challenge)

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

Fairy Leonora 18 years of age wonders off the fairy kingdom to see the world of mortals. Here she meets a 19 year old young man named Edward. And decides to stay.

No one can stop me from loving you

“For the love of your father, dear, Leonora do not pass that bounder,” said very old fairy, blocking the pathway to a world of danger where no beautiful creature from their people can survive. “If you do so, you won’t be able to fly. You would be like humans!

She had been trying to persuade another fairy, a lot younger, and more beautiful then life itself. On her back grew subtle azure wings hovering in air, gold lock fall casually down over dress like solid ice. Young fairy looked as a stuff of dreams, like something that in the world of mortals can not excites. This beauty was never meant to be seen by any mortal eyes, and as much as the fairy had been thrilled, the old one developed terror from this day.

“Grandmother, don’t be childish, nothing would ever occur to me,” said the fairy smiling harmoniously. “I just wish for to see the world further than my own. What is immoral with that? More to the point I have not got time to quarrel. I will return.

Leonora convey a smile, with which many fairy princes find charming beyond words both mortals and immortals. Her grandma felt her will remissive under power of her granddaughter’s clean innocent smile. In less then a half minute later, Jessica had won the battle. Defeated old fairies pinch her hands up admitting defeat, moving out-of-the-way to let her through.

*

In the meantime, Edward who just left turned 19 wondered about the woods away from his family farm. In his hand he held a bucket that must be filled with chestnut. With time he drew deeper into greenness of the nature that seemed so alive. Its smell he inhaled overcomes him. In order to enjoy more of this sweet nature he did the job quickly than he wanted at first and had lay down under an oak tree to catch a moment of sleep. He woke up two hours later, although it seemed that he spent longer in the realm of dreams, if not all eternity because he got awaken by a strange, but beautiful voice. Standing up he rubbed his eyes.

Voice was soft, melodic, sounded as lira. It ringed into his ears almost like no symphony he had ever hear. Each spoken word took his breath away, making him to hurry to the source of such purity.

With rapid steps Edward approached the place. Under what impression he was best says the fact he did not noticed as distance between him and the owner are melting.

He broke out of trees, on the shore of deep lake with a surface like a mirror that took scene of sky above. Here surprise of his life awaited him.

Beautiful lady washed her face hidden by gold locks.

“Excuse mi miss. Are you alright?” Edward said considerate.

“I am well, thanks for your question.

“Do you need help?” Edward enquired.

“Truth to be told I do. Can you tell me where am I currently.

He looked her plain.

“Madam Do you experience loss of memory?

“Who? Me? No.

Leonora glanced at the young man in front, and felt how his appearance is influencing her. She examined his large brown eyes like two bronze coins, and luxurious brown hair is shape of bale of hay. Her smooth cheeks gain blush. In that moment a voice in her mind which came from the heart spoke to her she must stay here.

“I’m not from around these parts,” she lied nonchalantly. “I’m lost and have no parents.

“Do you have a name?

“I do. It’s Leonora.

Now she hadn’t had the least intent to preserve given word, and return back. Leonora stretched her tiny hand in Edward, got up and followed him to destination.

Smiling fondly he gently put his arm over her shoulder. She was going to Edwards home. His parents have hosted their new guest as best as they could. A room next to Edwards had been assigned to her, and Leonora a fairy spent entire night in the house walking stealthy looking thing as like TV, washing machine, etc. Although she had left her wings behind, still she could move with ease, as if sliding through air.

Next day she spend in Edward company, who referred views of full admiration putting clearly that her presence fills him with desire to press his lips on her.

“I’ve never met anyone like you,” he admitted as they walked beside speedy brook where foam had been breaking onto the rock that picks from water. He pulled her beside himself, and Leonora put head on his shoulder.

“I’ve never known world could be so wonderful,” she replied.” Much better. Its weird how I used to think others species is bad, different from mine.

“Species?” said Edward confused.

Leonora bit her lip. She should not have said that.

“Forget what I’ve said. All that is important is this moment.

Then they kissed for long under trees. But Edward did not know the same kind of species is watching them from safe distance. Shocked by what it had seen it lifts up, panic-stricken to inform all they have a problem.

This is for AngelicAtitude Challenge. I'm better when writing novels are concerned for I can be very descriptive. This is a try to see if i'm any good at writing short story. I know this is not the perfect piece of writing, but if you like this tick that blue little box and comment.


Submitted: July 08, 2009

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LadyOfRohan

Well I like it. I know when you write short story you can not get to descriptive like when writing something big. I think you should have written a novel cause its a good story.But this is also good.Not bad,Not bad at all.

Mon, July 13th, 2009 11:54am

Author
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Thank you.

Wed, August 5th, 2009 3:20am

cherub666

Cooollll!:D
Raise hands those who liked the story and are eager for a part 2 (raises hands!)

Tue, July 14th, 2009 11:50am

Author
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Thank you for comment and reading

Mon, July 20th, 2009 9:06am

LOVEREADINGANDWRITING

This is a good start. I LIKE IT a lot! Waiting for part 2.

Wed, July 15th, 2009 4:13pm

UnderxYourxSpell

A really good start to the challenge! :) If you want, I can go through this story and proofread it for you so that it reads much more smoothly, as there are a few grammatical errors and times when the story changes tense :) Keep up the good work!

Wed, July 29th, 2009 8:58pm

Author
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Thank you. I try to do my best with tenses. Its hard.

Thu, July 30th, 2009 8:15am

UnderxYourxSpell

I think you've done an extraordinary job translating everything into english :) Like I said, if you want, I can tidy up some of the sentences here for you so they're all in the same tense (do you want it to be in present or past tense?).

Please let me know when you write more :)

Thu, July 30th, 2009 7:43pm

Author
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I've posted a second part of this story. you can tidy it up a bit. Past tense i think. That's what you get when all you ever learn at school is reading and translating. I've never even had a teacher that could tell me about tenses. It all came down onto reading and translating. I knew it would be hard, but I do try my best. And enjoy it.
Most of my friends would have throw the papers out the window.

Fri, July 31st, 2009 4:39am

mishelly

i like your writing style a lot! keep it up!

Thu, August 20th, 2009 4:12pm

Author
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Wow, thank you very much.

Thu, August 20th, 2009 9:14am

UnderxYourxSpell

Hello! Sorry I didn't reply sooner but I've been away. The mistakes and their corrections are:

'Leonora convey a smile, with which many fairy princes find charming beyond words both mortals and immortals.
Beautiful lady washed her face hidden by gold locks.' should be: 'Leonora conveyed a smile, which many fairy princes found charming beyond words, both mortals and immortals.'

'Her smooth cheeks gain blush' should be: 'Her smooth cheeks gained blush.'

'Next day she spend in Edward company, who referred views of full admiration putting clearly that her presence fills him with desire to press his lips on her' should be: 'The next day she spent in Edward company, who referred views of full admiration, putting clearly that her presence filled him with a desire to press his lips on hers.'

'But Edward did not know the same kind of species is watching them from safe distance. Shocked by what it had seen it lifts up, panic-stricken to inform all they have a problem' should be: 'But Edward did not know the same kind of species was watching them from a safe distance. Shocked by what it had seen, it lifted up, panic-stricken, to inform all that they had a problem.'

I think you write with amazing skill and I love your writing style :) Keep up the great work!

Sun, August 30th, 2009 8:52pm

Author
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I really appreciate the time you put into editing it. I must say I'm very grateful for your help. Thank you, thank you.

Mon, August 31st, 2009 3:42am

UnderxYourxSpell

Oh, and: 'Beautiful lady washed her face hidden by gold locks' should be: 'The beautiful lady washed her face, which was hidden by gold locks.'

Sorry about that :)

Sun, August 30th, 2009 8:53pm

Author
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no problem.Thanks once again!

Mon, August 31st, 2009 3:45am

Mirjana

This story has an interesting beginning. I'll read more and of course a like is in order!

Mon, September 14th, 2009 1:14pm

Author
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Oh, thank you!

Tue, September 15th, 2009 7:18am

Mistress of Word Play

A really wonderful write. Though different I found it refreshing. Hard to quite reading it once you start. Great job. Susan :)

Tue, December 8th, 2009 4:11pm

Author
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Thank you very much. An opinion from a writer as great as yourself means a lot to me.

Tue, December 8th, 2009 8:34am

NazireC

This was a very intriguing and a very fun story to read.
i loved it from top to bottom and with so much to indulge one's self in.

Thu, January 21st, 2010 7:14pm

Author
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Thank you very much. I'm glad a writer such as yourself loved this.

Sat, February 6th, 2010 1:46pm

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