The Lonely (Third Draft)

Poem by: Jeremy Walker

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This is all I got so far but "Brave Owl" said she liked it and wanted me to finish it so I guess it will have to do for now. I don't know though I might end up changing it a bit. It depends on how I like it next time I take a shower. ;) Let me know what you think.
Draft written 16 April 2015
-This is my own writing-

You live your life

You keep your hate

Don't say goodbye to yesterday

You hold it in

Won't let it out

Don't want the world to know your pain

Do you think that I've never felt that way BE'Fooooooore

This Is For The Lonely

This Is For The Lost

For The Broken And The Hopeless

For The Ones Without A Cause

You Feel Like A Disaster

You Feel Like Such A Wreck

You Feel Like Your Lifes Goin' Down

But It's Not Over Yeeeeeet

In discontent

With how things go

You try to blame a god above

Does he exist

Well no one knows

But some have faith while others don't

Do you think that I've never felt that way BE'Fooooooore

But Now I Know, Nooow I Knoooow

That World Is Just This Way

All Of The Hopes, Aaall Of The Dreeeeams

Don't Have To Be Washed Away

As long as you know who you are and just move on.

I know it's hard

That's how life is

I learned it from an early age

That doesn't mean

That it's the end

o_O

Do you think that I've never felt that way BE'Foooooooore

This Is For The Lonely

This Is For The Lost

For The Broken And The Hopeless

For The Ones Without A Cause

You Feel Like A Disaster

You Feel Like Such A Wreck

You Feel Like Your Lifes Goin' Down

But It's Not over YEEEEEET

Submitted: April 16, 2015

Song Lyrics god life world pain lost lonely lyrics song hate disaster blame rocks wreck

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Mindy Larson

I like this. It makes a very awesome song.

Tue, April 21st, 2015 12:57am

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Thank you. ;)

Tue, April 21st, 2015 11:17am

ReyJPGon18

It's well written and as someone who enjoys rock music, i'd like to hear it with music. Furthermore i feel that you could really get a large fanbase to identify with said song, it really does provide that sense of sympathy that some people need
I would also appreciate if you could read my poem that i just posted and give me some feed back

Mon, April 27th, 2015 7:04pm

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Thanks! I'm going to upload another one I just came up with called 'Obituary' which has a similar feel only I'm the one talking about being "dead".

Mon, April 27th, 2015 12:45pm

Charlie Fensworth

The chorus was swag. I am thinking about making a song. I have one up on my page. Check it out? I need all the help I can get from someone who obviously is a great songwriter.

Wed, May 27th, 2015 4:55am

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Thanks for that. ;) I like how you added in the part about me being a "great songwriter" lol Anyways. I checked it out ;)

Wed, May 27th, 2015 11:10am

Decim

This song is totally me cause my life does suck but seeing this cheered me up so thanks :D

Tue, June 23rd, 2015 1:05am

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;) np

Sat, June 27th, 2015 1:23pm

Salma Said

I love that song! For some reason, I have a tone inside my head that matches these lyrics. Hope you could sing all the songs you've written! I am so excited to hear them all.

Sat, December 5th, 2015 1:58pm

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Thanks, so do I. I have so many I don't know when I'll get around to them all though.